Don’t lie to us
we're not beautiful
we're not everything
we never was
all this pain
Hates us
Brakes us
Never had us
We’re use to cutting
we know it’s not the answer
It’s all that’s helping
That’s how we cope
So if u see us
Don’t hate us
We just want to die
If that’s okay?
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Hello broken.inside.
Very dark piece you've penned here but none the less i can relate! It's good to get your emotions out by writing and you've done that very well here! You've opened yourself up for everyone to see and let the anger, pain and frustration gush forth! I respect that and believe it's a good thing. I used to cut and know the pain, guilt, fear that goes with it! I can relate in that way!
Just a little note on some mistakes in this piece that I feel could benifit it by correcting. On the forth line I think it should be "were" not "was". On the 9th line I think it should be "used" not "use"
Other than that your poem is very good and honest! I hope it has helped to vent those emotions and that you feel a little better!
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