I used to be a poet, the thoughts
Escaped from where they'd gone again,
I used to be a poet when I was younger,
But now, with words stirring but
Hardly rising, angels with broken wings,
Now I cannot raise my head, a burden
Laid across my back, I used to be,
But I think too much on a distant
Past, I used to be, and now I'm not,
And it's not something that I find
I deeply regret, I think on it with
Some relief, I used to love my words,
The images that were painted with black
Ink, now I am a capitalist, I dream
Only of material things, dollar bills,
And traffic signs blurring as I pass,
I live my life a quarter of a mile at
At a time, and in my head I can hear
Dean quietly advise, I live fast, die
Young, and leave as that time comes,
A good looking corpse.
A contest entry
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1750 points, ended June 8, 122 entries
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Comments
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You have one period, and the rest commas. I don't believe that's correct. I'm not an experct at punctuation but just reading some of the lines I'm thinking it's not.
Other than that, a nice poem that you have written here.
-Nam

