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[ I listen ]

I listen
Ever so carefully
To your judgment
a thought (according to you)
Just tossed out
Into the air

But burns
Biting the flesh
Of my heart
Do you not care?
Your filth-filled words
Sour coated
stick to
the back of
my throat

I only wanted to reveal
My inner bruises 
Bring them to the surface
before you
so you could see 
maybe even heal 
Do you not understand?
I never asked
for your critical opinions
of my, now, revealed concealments
Why can't you just
take care of me? 

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Just a thought - something on the mind for a while

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  • Deadmans Heart
    May 15, 2008

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    teenage mistreatment, oh how I despise it. This horror destroys souls of truly loving individuals, while the rest play hanky panky and call it love


  • eltortedequeso
    May 14, 2008

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    oh, this one hits home for me. very deep and true to the heart. very strong, one of your bests for sure!


  • Godless But Divine gold member
    May 13, 2008

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    care

    An ugly face sometimes life wear
    Taking away hope and replace despair
    Wish I could only be there
    To comfort you and give you care


  • arafura gold member
    May 13, 2008
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    This is very good. A powerful write that is deep and thoughtful. Well done!

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