I listen
Ever so carefully
To your judgment
a thought (according to you)
Just tossed out
Into the air
But burns
Biting the flesh
Of my heart
Do you not care?
Your filth-filled words
Sour coated
stick to
the back of
my throat
I only wanted to reveal
My inner bruises
Bring them to the surface
before you
so you could see
maybe even heal
Do you not understand?
I never asked
for your critical opinions
of my, now, revealed concealments
Why can't you just
take care of me?
Author notes
Just a thought - something on the mind for a while
A contest entry
- Give Me the Best of You(show me your soul) by Deadmans Heart.
2000 points, ended May 18, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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teenage mistreatment, oh how I despise it. This horror destroys souls of truly loving individuals, while the rest play hanky panky and call it love
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oh, this one hits home for me. very deep and true to the heart. very strong, one of your bests for sure!
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care
An ugly face sometimes life wear
Taking away hope and replace despair
Wish I could only be there
To comfort you and give you care
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Hey, that's pretty good...thanx for the response to my cries in this poem!
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I know how you feel thats all..
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This is very good. A powerful write that is deep and thoughtful. Well done!
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