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Petals pressed
between haunting silent syllables
as red ribbon holds key to mercy,

heart bleeds
upon parchment~

 

 

 

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Prompt: New Chapter

A contest entry

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  • rustynite silver member
    May 14, 2008

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    Excellent. To me this is written about the bible. At least that is how I imply my own thoughts on it. And that is what poetry is supposed to do. smile. I have spent 10 minutes here reading it. I bow


    • jasminerose
      May 14, 2008
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      Interpretation is the key to poetry as it is should offer the reader to make their own conclusions! So I am very pleased to hear your thoughts on my poetry and it is very kind of you to comment so beautifully!
      Thank you!
      Jasminerose


  • Jersene gold member
    May 13, 2008

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    There is a deepness to this...even in darkness there is always that glimmer of hope, that relief of letting it all go. Lovely penning!


    • jasminerose
      May 13, 2008
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      Hi Jersene
      I am so pleased to hear your lovely thoughts on my poetry!!Thank you so very much!!!
      Linda


  • Room without doors gold member
    May 13, 2008

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    Outstanding

    This for me represented writing with all its soul searching. Sometimes it brings us pain but mostly it is exactly as you describe:
    Petals pressed
    between haunting silent syllables
    I loved that image. Congratulations on the trophy.


    • jasminerose
      May 13, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the very lovely compliment on my poem!! That is exactly what I was striving for when writing this one... I am so pleased you found a connection within!
      Thank you for the good cheer as it is always so wonderful to hear from you
      Linda


  • moonbumps silver member
    May 13, 2008
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    Beautiful haunting write - many congrats on the Bronze-so well deserved babes-
    Love Hilly xxx


    • jasminerose
      May 13, 2008
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      Thank you Hilly
      I am so glad to hear you enjoyed this one and thank you so much for the good cheer too
      Linda


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 13, 2008

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    Well this is just gorgeous hun! As always written with such grace and depth!!


    • jasminerose
      May 13, 2008
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      Thank you so much Jackie, it is always so nice to hear your thoughts on my poetry
      Linda


  • Age of Rain
    May 12, 2008
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    NICE!!! This is just plain gorgeous.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    May 12, 2008

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    Love the juxtaposition between the word/paper and the bleeding heart.

    I love the ribbon marking that special place of mercy. A wonderful image.

    Good luck to ya!

    ten


  • Lavender Butterfly
    May 12, 2008
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    Great imagery and detail here... x


  • poppa
    May 12, 2008

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    Beautiful write ....just flows so softly and cuts deep....good luck


  • Ghetto Superstar.
    May 12, 2008
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    Forgot to applaud sorry lol x

  • Ghetto Superstar.
    May 12, 2008
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    This is dark and beautifu at the same time, i love it! Good luck!! xxxx


  • poet2angels gold member
    May 12, 2008

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    You always amaze me, Sis...
    This has so much emotion flowing through every beautiful word...
    SIgh~

    Lynda

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