pleased with the fading rays of light
brightness finally giving way to nite
shadows grow long as sunlight dims
heavy darkness walking soft again
sleepless yet peaceful a prophet trudges on
mentally condescending the impending dawn
dimly light lights light the nocturnals path
quietly contemplating lashes of past wrath
still, the hours of nite cannot suspend
temporarily the lacking light can cleanse
soaking up the black a lone soul marches
thirsting for truth--the soul parches
in an instance all wrong is right
dues paid--pledge allegiance to the nite
A contest entry
- Only Prewrites by Samplette.
1000 points, ended September 20, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
how bout it?
Comments
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Very nice. I think it would have read better with some punctuation, but I loved it all the same!
Best wishes,
Frogz~ -
This has a touch of inspiration within it. The one line, "dimly light lights light the nocturnals path" is awkward and a tongue twister.
Thank you for entering.
Sam
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very good. I like the description of the transition into night
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