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Creation of God

I have buried myself alive,

my fears stop me from living. 

I am the walking dead,

while my ghost tries to live.

The second I was born,

I was dead to this world. 

There is no place here,

for someone like me.

Forever trying to be like you,

forever failing in all I do.

So I seek forgivenss,

praying Heaven excepts me.. 

But if I don't make it,

I tried to be the best I could.

God knows me even when I don't. 

 

 

We are all unique.

God knew what he was doing,

when he created every one of us.

Giving us weaknesses so we can grow,

mistakes so we can learn.

So one-day we will shine like him,

and see beauty in most simplistic of things. 

So that we will stop destroying,

the very things keeping us alive. 

To learn respect and tolerance,

for every living thing on this planet.

We are every blade of grass,

and Sun that sets in the Sky. 

Forever a creation of God.

An optimist in a world of confusion.

 

 

 

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  • dustookie2
    May 13, 2008

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    James what can I say this is very profound and gives some deep thoughts to linger and ponder just what you are saying.  There is such an inspirational message The beginning of the second stanza is nothing short of honest truth .... we are all individuals each with their own lessons to be learnt...this singularity is what makes us so interesting and different. Brilliantly penned I stand in applause James EXCELLENT


  • PrincessOfDecent
    May 12, 2008
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    wow like AWESOME! Its like totally RAD!

    • DarkHunter
      May 14, 2008
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      Thank you for taking the time to read me, appreciate it.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 12, 2008

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    Wow, you have made this even better! The ending is so brilliant. Not being like everyone else is a good thing. As you said being unique is what makes us special. Great write, the additions made an awesome poem even more brilliant.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 12, 2008
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    This is so sad, yet I understand how it is to feel this way. Fear is something we all must try to get over. We all fear something. With help I think we can overcome fear. Good luck in the contest.


  • Darkest Lover
    May 12, 2008

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    Very Good

    i Love This Write
    It Speaks Alot About Loss
    and Pain And True Sadness
    I Like It Alot

    Thanks For Entering
    And Good Luck

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