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He Said He Would

He said he’d be there
When momma tucked her in.
But only momma
Pulled blankets to her chin.

He said he’d be there
When momma no longer could.
He wasn’t,
Now momma’s gone for good.

While tear tracks mark lies.

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  • Angelflower Greeters member
    May 15

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    This was a really nice take on the prompt.
    Very sad!! simple yet it touches the heart..
    I really liked this!!
    Best of luck..

    Angel

  • Aerden gold member
    May 13
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    Oooh! Nice poem for the prompt!

  • hollowriver
    May 13
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    this is so simple but its a good write and the simplexicty is what makes it great

  • Lil-Bit Crazy silver member
    May 13

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    awww... hugs.... great write even if its soooo sad.. thank you for sharing... and good luck in this contest.... hugs

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 13

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    A hauntingly sad write that is so touching! Well done and good luck!

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