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Cry,Lie,Die

I don't know how to say this,
Must I say it? ,
My love is dead,
Rivers turn red,
No one is listening to what I said,
Don't know,
Can't show,
Why am I alone? ,
All alone in the Ice cold corner,
I know I'm not really alone,
But I feel like I am,
I pretend to be,
Nothing sounds like me no more,
Like I have no soul,
I feel so empty,
I need to cry,
To lie,
And die,
Please let me,
Cry,
Lie,
Die,
I'm losing the will to live,
Leave me to die,
To rot in my damn grave,
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  • klockworkpurple
    July 29, 2008

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    Amazing!
    I know you probably hear that someone can relate to this a lot,
    but seriously,
    I've been through exactly the same thing.
    I can't stand it,
    and obviously,
    neither can other people.


  • paulcreates silver member
    June 2, 2008
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    This is the best part of this whole poem:
    "I know I'm not really alone,
    But I feel like I am,
    I pretend to be,..."
    I liked it because it shows that you know what's happening even though it's hard to climb out of the hole.
    Hang in there....

    Paul


  • rin-macabre
    May 28, 2008

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    sad..

    but the abrupt shortness of this poem makes it good. you cut it to the point, not saying that long poems are bad, i like this because with the words you used, even thought they were simple words, you displayed feeling. that what poetry is about, getting your feelings out with a scheme and in the most obserd way possible. make it crazy love, but i hate to see that you feel this way darling. that worrys me. the poem is magnifecent tho, great job. ^.^


  • skye01 gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    Very powerful emotions come through your words. You seem to have a very sad theme in all your writings without bringing any positive lessons learned from each experience. Very powerful poem.

  • Tercarro
    May 13, 2008

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    I hear this loudly

    I hear this being spokne very loudly in an empty room made of tin, so that it reverberates from wall to wall compelling everyone to not just listen, but understand.
    I loved it because it has character of it's own.
    Terry


  • Dancing Alone
    May 13, 2008

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    i really like it....it is the kind that everyone relates to ona different level.... but i think i fell in love


  • DarkHunter
    May 12, 2008

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    Awesome, very deep like our lives are no longer ours, and in some ways are not. Big Brother is watching you!! Sad but true. Cherish what you have for tomorrow it could be gone.


  • LoveDeprived
    May 12, 2008
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    ops forgot multiple aplauses

  • LoveDeprived
    May 12, 2008

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    well hmm,, its ass, in a good way ^^,.. i mean it rocks the emotions it has creates a universal effect to the reader which is like that " I feel you effect ".. the words you used are the most powerful words there are "Cry","Lie","Die", amazing dude.. hope you get silver i get gold haha,, just playin, well goodluck ^^,


  • Sorrow is the name
    May 12, 2008

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    Breath Taking

    This Write Is So Good
    I'm Not to Sure How To Describe It
    But Its Just That Good

    I'm Not sure If Its About The Picture
    Or Some other Type Of Pain
    But Its Still Good

    Thank You For Your Write
    And Best Of Luck

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