It's amazing that seeing you across
a crowded room can still make my heart stop.
Considering you are the one who broke it,
time after time,
I'd say that's quite a feat.
I'm astounded at the way a brief glimpse of you,
left me confused and distraught for days.
Especially since I'm married,
and he treats me like gold.
What's the matter with me?
It's shocking how the sound of your voice
can still make me feel warm inside.
It conjured up memories and feelings
I tried to repress.
I guess some things don't stay buried.
It's disconcerting how I feel today,
knowing you are somewhere in this city too.
And even without trying, you've made me regret
my best decision...
Moving past loving you.
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Option 2
A contest entry
- Something Special by Fallen Below.
300 points, ended May 13, 2008, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Bravo!
I can see why you got the Gold with this! Very heart rending and emotionally passonate! You really take the reader inside your private thoughts so well! I love the honesty and sincerity with which you express yourself here! Was this written out of real life experience?
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I love this. Very emotional, great write, and I know from personal experience exactly where you are coming from.
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this is really powerful and good i see u have won a gold medal fo it i love the part in the second stanza were it was talking about u being married and how he treated u like gold ur a really awesome poet and u really show it godd luck and i cant wait to hear another
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This is one of the best you've written. I am really enjoying seeing you grow here on AP... Exploring other types of poetry by just letting go and letting the emotion flow.
I know the one you are writing about, I was there for your pain, and that really knocked this one out of the park for me. Also, I relate completely to the fact that you can love someone, while rationally realizing they do not deserve it.
My favorite part was when you mentioned being married and asked what was wrong with yourself. It just made the poem seem so honest, raw...real.
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Wow---This is awesome in its sincerity!!
Very well done & Best of luck in the contest!!
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so true....
great write...
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