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Springtime Promise

 
 
 
 
 

Sweet spring.

She sits in the palm of our hands

for days on end; a week maybe


sweating the trees

and greening the grass -


Buds of mysterious like

appear slowly on the dark branches

of the trees


daffodils bloom,

and bees tend to awaken -

 

 

 

 

and then. She leaves.

 

 

Coldness, and bitter rain -

falls down on the half – budded trees


freezing their children

and slashing their bloom -


beheading the daffodils and

punishing the grass.


The coldness lingers -

her clouds on the distant horizon

gray as death on a gravel street.

 

 

 


And then. She is back.

 

 

Warm spring air, wafting through

the newly brightening sky...


The songbirds appear in the trees;

those the days before had found barren,

and they sing their lullabies

and their sugary songs


which matches the taste

of pollen upon the air -

as the buzzing of bees


comes alive again.

 
 
 
 
 
 

Author notes

Prompt:
Should I stay or Should I Go.

I did not like the nature of this prompt (haha. Get it, Nature?)
Anyways, it was typically uninspiring... So I had to do something eh.

Sorry -- Not my best work =/


But,

((Perception is my name.))

enjoy ~

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  • kendhal22
    May 19, 2008

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    wow!

    This a beautiful poem and has a lot of great images on the prompt. Good luck in the contest audition. Kendhal22


  • tiggercline
    May 17, 2008

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    I actually rather like it...The cycle of life and death has always fascinated me, and this is no different. Not much emotion here, but I like the word choice, although in stanza seven, I probably would have said "slaying" not "slashing".


  • warrior-eagle
    May 13, 2008

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    I give this 95% also.
    if you didn't like the prompt
    you should have said so, i would have given you another one

  • haley27 gold member
    May 13, 2008
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    wow

    Ilike ur poem.It has beauty and grace Haley27


  • Blooming Poet
    May 12, 2008

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    This is wonderrful. Thannks for entering. Perception you always amaze me so much. Your overall score is 95%


  • warrior-eagle
    May 12, 2008
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    Should I Stay or Should I go

    Thats your prompt

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