I have felt peace
looking at undisturbed
foot prints
on white sand
quiet dawn at the shore
and when the moon
seemed to be a private dancer
in my long nights
I have felt peace
then I met your smile
woman and child
a face radiating light
pure aura
there in your eyes
I have seen peace
Author notes
To Marion who radiates tranquility
JFTJOI - not to be judged
In a list
A contest entry
- THE COLOUR OF BEING...COALESCED~A Tribute to MAA by Blue Rew.
1800 points, ended May 14, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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beautiful~
This is penned beautiful...
Love the peaceful imagery in this poem sis...
I don't know Marion but am sure they appreciated this lovely poem...
Hugs
Susan~~~
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I'm only familiar with name but now you've given me a glimpse of the essence of the person you are writing about. Thanks for the peek and the peace.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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much here to loe, and the tonic of red suggests a radiance which resembles peace. LOvely
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I love these simple moments of peace, you have painted. The only thing I noticed, and found myself stumbling upon, was 'feet prints'...footprints, seems to flow better (at least for me)...of course, either way I think it's a gorgeous write. Glad I stumbled upon your poetry
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Really beautiful, Mari, and oh, so apt. I loved the serene imagery employed here. My absolute favorite line was that all encompassing line "mother and child." What wonderful expression of the wholeness of peace.
A truly endearing tribute to a great lady!
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Gentle and truly a wondrous insight into
another's nature. You make the reader yearn
to know her more and that is powerful writing!
Blue
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Oh wow... I can feel the peace here. The usage of words is just perfect- it gives the perfect feel of "peace". Reads like a whisper in the ear... beautiful writing.
- namita
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amazing.
This is beautiful. -
Such a subtle merging of your
before and after maa experience,
surging to find that perfect peace.
Exceptional!
Aesthete
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hahaha, you don't know my warrioress-side yet !!!
I have it well-hidden, it just comes out of the closet occasionally ... ask my hubby, he'll say "oooh laaa ! peaceful ? invite your friends over when you put on your kali-mask !" (the hindu goddess with the blood-dripping tongue, who chops off heads and wears them as a garland - no joke ... 
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but your wonderful words look behind the impermanent mask ... thank you for reminding me of my essential nature of peace - which is your very own ...
much love,
marion
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Ah, the kali-mask I have calls IT, but has been locked in the cellar for long time now
yes, not a pretty scene when IT and kali come up lol
Yours has terrifying sight though
Lots of love to you always on Marion
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well, it's actually more symbolic for chopping down the ego ...
of course, ego does NOT like that ...
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a very beautiful tribute...perfect title & words...
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She does indeed radiate peace and light. How beautifully you've written this, Mari.
So much caring and gentleness in your words.
Wonderful!
~ Nicolette
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It is beautiful and could just as easily have been written about your poetry, In fact those are words I would use to describe yours.
There, my heels shouldn't get nipped for that innocuous comment.
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wonderful poetry here such fullness in these verses, and i have to agree..an aura of peace...yes, beautiful gentle, caring words...so completely appropriate...h
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