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she made me see how peace looks like









I have felt peace
looking at undisturbed
foot prints
on white sand
quiet dawn at the shore

and when the moon
seemed to be a private dancer
in my long nights
I have felt peace

then I met your smile
woman and child
a face radiating light
pure aura

there in your eyes
I have seen peace








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To Marion who radiates tranquility

JFTJOI - not to be judged

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  • leo2 silver member
    May 20

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    I'm only familiar with name but now you've given me a glimpse of the essence of the person you are writing about. Thanks for the peek and the peace.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

  • much here to loe, and the tonic of red suggests a radiance which resembles peace. LOvely


  • Jersene silver member
    May 16

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    I love these simple moments of peace, you have painted. The only thing I noticed, and found myself stumbling upon, was 'feet prints'...footprints, seems to flow better (at least for me)...of course, either way I think it's a gorgeous write. Glad I stumbled upon your poetry

  • Really beautiful, Mari, and oh, so apt. I loved the serene imagery employed here. My absolute favorite line was that all encompassing line "mother and child." What wonderful expression of the wholeness of peace.

    A truly endearing tribute to a great lady!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    May 14

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    Gentle and truly a wondrous insight into
    another's nature. You make the reader yearn
    to know her more and that is powerful writing!
    Blue

  • Namita silver member
    May 14

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    Oh wow... I can feel the peace here. The usage of words is just perfect- it gives the perfect feel of "peace". Reads like a whisper in the ear... beautiful writing.

    - namita

  • amazing.

    This is beautiful.
  • Such a subtle merging of your
    before and after maa experience,
    surging to find that perfect peace.

    Exceptional!

    Aesthete


  • maa gold member
    May 13

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    hahaha, you don't know my warrioress-side yet !!! I have it well-hidden, it just comes out of the closet occasionally ... ask my hubby, he'll say "oooh laaa ! peaceful ? invite your friends over when you put on your kali-mask !" (the hindu goddess with the blood-dripping tongue, who chops off heads and wears them as a garland - no joke ... )

    but your wonderful words look behind the impermanent mask ... thank you for reminding me of my essential nature of peace - which is your very own ...

    much love,
    marion


    • MariGoes gold member
      May 13

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      Ah, the kali-mask I have calls IT, but has been locked in the cellar for long time now
      yes, not a pretty scene when IT and kali come up lol
      Yours has terrifying sight though

      Lots of love to you always on Marion

      • maa gold member
        May 14
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        well, it's actually more symbolic for chopping down the ego ... of course, ego does NOT like that ...
  • a very beautiful tribute...perfect title & words...


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 12

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    She does indeed radiate peace and light. How beautifully you've written this, Mari.

    So much caring and gentleness in your words.
    Wonderful!

    ~ Nicolette

  • It is beautiful and could just as easily have been written about your poetry, In fact those are words I would use to describe yours.

    There, my heels shouldn't get nipped for that innocuous comment.


  • Peteskid gold member
    May 12

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    wonderful poetry here such fullness in these verses, and i have to agree..an aura of peace...yes, beautiful gentle, caring words...so completely appropriate...h

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