There once was a girl from japan.
Who didnt work but collected cans.
She lived in her car.
And got drunk at a bar.
And wondered why she couldnt find a man.
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- Limericks ... by ecrivain01.
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If you remove "she" ...
from the last line, the meter will be better. You also left out the final "e" in "wondered". There's no punctuation either, but that's not a major thing here. If it were in one of my other contests though, it wouldn't fly.
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