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Let them eat cake

If I could wrap blandness up

In a pinstripe suit,

and leave him,

my white bread man-

toasting -

In someone else's kitchen

I would. 

 

Wholesome man,

Soft as country rolls

with the essence

ground from the chaff

Making flour

too weak to bake with

 

I only wanted to taste,

I didn't know

that taste would stain the loaf so pale

with mild-mannered surprise

and the expectation

that I would stay,

here, in a gingerbread house

that didn't taste sweet.

Where the only cage was guilt.

 

And so I'm left,
fidgeting the crumbs
of my Hovis man

Between fingers

that still smell faintly like

honey.

Author notes

No, I have no idea why I wrote about bread.
not sure at all about this whole style or anything
But, here it is. Enjoy. Or go make toast.

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  • The unusual topic makes it even more interesting. I like it a lot.

  • this probably just made my life.
    (:


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    Hey this is heaps good!! Brilliant use of metaphor! I like it, and it's so... sweet, sad... well written. Great work!! Besides - it's not every day you get such an obscure topic twisted so poetically! Again, good job....


  • usually-untitled
    May 22, 2008
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    i really like this. alot. wow.


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    Actually, I'm a good little Irish girl - so I'm a carb freak and I love bread! The smell of fresh bread baking is, sometimes, the best thing in the world. So, I dig this poem a lot!


  • DAMSELx
    May 19, 2008

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    This is such an interesting piece. I love the metaphorical content! Thank you for your entry, best of luck!

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