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Perfect Love

forever you are mine, lost in sweet attention


love sublime, our love, so precious and so rare

bears roots of great depth and strength

withstanding the storms of emotion that come

to uproot and steal away this bond between us

there's no path too difficult to traverse

that we cannot conquer them one by one

with my hand in yours, two pulses unite
one heart, one soul, one mind

gentleness and tenderness, encapsulating all

the frangrance of love, musky and intoxicating

falls upon us from paradise, like eiderdown

our perfect union melds with nature's own lust


Author notes

1 John 4:18
"There is no fear in love; but perfect love casts out fear: because fear has torment. He that fears is not made perfect in love."

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  • Mallig
    May 20, 2008

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    This is very beautiful, to achieve that kind of relationship is such a blessing. Congratulations on the bronze!


  • Truetome
    May 20, 2008

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    truly a beautiful poem you have written here. Lots of us get fearful and you have really written of faith in Love. congratulations on winning the bronze trophy!


  • leo2 gold member
    May 20, 2008

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    It's perfect! I envy the persons in that kind of relationship and am especially fond of the one who can write about it so beautifully poetic. Congratulations on the bronze.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • trista gold member
    May 19, 2008

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    Very lovely interpretation of the quote! If my muse had cooperated a little better, it's one I seriously considered trying to write on too.

    I really enjoyed many of your word choices here, several of which I don't often see, such as "eiderdown" and "musky". Your message is just as beautiful, and the subtly sensual feel is well executed. The only thing I wasn't crazy about was seeing "lust" as the very last word in the poem. Typically, the last line and especially the last word in a line is remembered more and gets more emphasis put on it. And to me, there are too many bad connotations to the word "lust" to have it in such a loving related poem. But, that's just me.

    Still, a beautiful job on this, and I congratulate you on a well-deserved trophy. Thanks so much for sharing!

    Best wishes,
    ~J.


  • chasingtheday gold member
    May 19, 2008

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    a good opening, full of strong smiles and soft bold love, then it moves along like a song with the repeat on 'love' with a nice end line to beginning line rhyme giving it a lilt in the mind. ah yes the sweet strong bond of love, it can be supple and stretch to forever. it is strange how we all feel incomplete whilst alone and as love enters our lives we say things like i am one now, we are complete together, one mind etc, love makes us think like that yes. i like the use of the word 'musky' it is a word i do not often see used, i will pocket it and use it in one of my future poems lol - all smiles in the twists and turns of love here.


  • Heavenly Angel
    May 14, 2008

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    Such a beautiful, beautiful pen!
    I truly loved this!
    Thank you so much for sharing and for being part of this contest!
    All the best to you!


  • Billyjay
    May 13, 2008
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    Lay me down and talk to me in whispers.Please don't forget one word, one line.


  • LionessK Greeters member
    May 13, 2008
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  • I Am Gun
    May 13, 2008

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    this had me attached at the very beginning i loved it. its gorgeous in every way. i especially love the last line

  • TheRealDeal
    May 13, 2008
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    This grabbed my attention from the very opening line. It is certainly an attention getter. Now this I can honestly say weaves some interesting concepts through my mind. You have a beautifully crafted piece here with a nice flow as well. A touch of sweet romance and forever love here. Good Luck Miss.
    JLG


  • Midnight Lace
    May 13, 2008

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    This entire piece just simply seemed to warm my heart and make me smile. To describe love in such a beautiful way is such a unique thing to find nowadays and you did it in spade dear one. Best of luck to ya!
    ~Midnight Lace


  • TXCowgirl
    May 13, 2008

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    I think this certainly describes perfect love well. It not only casts out all fear, it gets you up, over and across all the mountains and land mines as well. Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
    TxCowgirl


  • brodie25
    May 13, 2008
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    oooooh not a human word can describe love. i likes and hope i read that okay
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