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Your God

I appologize for I cannot give you the world
Because I cannot give you yourself
no mortal can
so i have chose a path
to fight mortality
and become a diety

i dont want to be a mere friend
i want to be so much more
i dont want to be your guardian angel
i dont want to guide you
i wnat to be your god
to give you it all
everthing you want
every last desire
all the world possesses on a single wire

I want to control every emotion
read every thought
predict every reaction
hold your life in my hands
and protect it for all of eternity

i dont want to be a mere friend
i want to be so much more
i dont want to be your guardian angel
i dont want to guide you
i wnat to be your god
to give you it all
everthing you want
every last desire
all the world possesses on a single wire

I want to be your love,
your thoughts,
your hatred,
your everything
the one you come to when youre scared
the one that comforts you at night
i want to be your god
and spend every moment with you
from now until no more moments exist
to be at your side
to be your god
yours and yours alone
thats what i want
to be Your God.

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option 2 unrequited love

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  • Florida Sunshine
    July 12, 2008

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    A lovely thought -- This is poetically written sounding as sweet as a song.

    In your refrain you have one spelling mistake, I take it you just copied and pasted it because it's the same in both refrains:

    "i wnat to be your god" < Should be I 'want'

    It didn't hurt the read I still understood-but you might want to fix it for those judges who are sticklers about grammar.

    touching words finish the piece:

    "i want to be your god
    and spend every moment with you
    from now until no more moments exist
    to be at your side
    to be your god
    yours and yours alone
    thats what i want
    to be Your God."

    Thanks for sharing your work with me, it was a pleasure to read. Thank you so much for entering the "Passion" contest.

    Best of luck to you,
    Florida Sunshine



  • innocence jaded.xx
    June 24, 2008

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    This is so beautiful yet so sad. You have an incredible way with words and putting them together to portray how you're feeling.

    "I want to control every emotion
    read every thought
    predict every reaction
    hold your life in my hands
    and protect it for all of eternity"

    Absolutely just wow. Mind boggling, seriously. Those lines put me in complete awe and have such meaning to them. I especially loved the first two lines, because I would love to control my own emotions, but of course, it's basically impossible. Excellent write. This is talent :] Thanks for enteringgg<3


  • lesbian-in-love
    May 26, 2008

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    I really like this one. If we could give everything to that person we love it would make it easier. I wish I could. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • ucancallmereal
    May 12, 2008

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    WOWOWOWOWOWOW. woah. i bet if you read this to a girl she would fall over flat! in a good way of course(: its just WOAHHH. i mean seriously, im really speechless. it was just freakin amazing!!