On my shoulder lay your head,
The day is over, its time for bed.
Close your eyes and go to sleep,
Warm and cozy, you I’ll keep.
Gone are the fears you felt today,
Cares of life will drift away.
You'll fly away on angel’s wings,
With dreams of love and happier things.
And as you're drifting off to sleep,
Safe and protected, you I’ll keep.
Until dawn greets you from bed,
On my shoulder lay your head.
Author notes
This poem was written as a lullaby for my godson that I sing to him to get him to sleep when he is sick or not feeling good that usually helps to get him to sleep. The picture is me and him one day when I was taking care of him and was taken by myself. This poem was written March 3rd 2008.
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wow... this is beautiful. your godson is very lucky to have you in his life great job babe keep the ink flowing
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No really I'm the lucky one. hes given me back so much more than i could ever give him.
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My daughter had the same pacifier!
I'd just like to point out, in line 11 .. you say "greats" (great means = exceptionally good .. as in "Wow, this food is great!") I think you meant "greets" (greet = welcome .. as in "Come greet the guests!")
Also .. since you use punctuation through the poem, you may want to consider slightly modifying lines 4, and 10 .. it would read more smoothly if you added some commas, "Warm and cozy, you, I’ll keep.".
This is an adorable lullaby, very loving and sweet! Your Godson is very lucky to have such a doting Godfather .. thank you for entering the contest! -
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Thank you for point out the mistakes. I really appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and good luck judgeing the contest.
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bravo!
*note: spelling error in line 9 should be you're
this is so, so sweet, what a divine thing to do for your godson!
its perfectly precious!
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Thank you for the comment and complimnet. And the effect he has had on me and my life far exceded any poem id ever be able to write.
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Many thanks for your entry in our contest, I still think it is a beautiful lullaby and although it made the finalist list, I'm afraid we had to demote it. There is a spelling error and the meter is poor on a couple of lines.
Please join us in future contests...Sue and Jeff -
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Could you message me withthe misspellings please?
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A beautiful lullabye, and I love the rhyming couplets. Eddie is certainly a handsome little guy.
Sassy,
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Yeah he is. H's addorable.
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very sweet.
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Thanks
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This is so sweet =]
You'll make a fantastic father someday.
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I really hope so. I mean I'm pretty sure I'll be a good father.
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What a beautiful little lullaby you've written for your godson and the pair of you seem to be very comfortable with the arrangement you have. Does your lullaby have a particular tune that it's sung to or one of your own making?
All the best in the contest...Sue
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I dont really have a specific tune I can say I got from anywhere. I just use the one that popped into my head when I started singing it to him.
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