I knew you were the one
But what took me so long
Saw you with another whore
Couldn’t take another blow
Bled my heart in sanity
Don’t know whether you’ll eventually be
Trust my heart to talk in tongues
Don’t know where ill go from here
Hoping you’ll give me a second chance
Yes you did the last time gone
Thought that you’ll always be mine
You gave me a smile that struck my heart
The loneliness crept right out of heart
But what took me so long?
Just the thought of you beside me
Gives me tremors right down till my knees
Oh the timid ones do not get what they want
But one day Ill hope that Ill have the courage
Without the thought of you rejecting me
Alas, can’t wait for that day
Hoping that tomorrow will be the day
A contest entry
- You Don't Know Me... by artisticxpoetry.
900 points, ended May 31, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what is your first impression?
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can you please tell me what made you write this, I know it may seem obvious but I would really like you to write in the comment box what your intention was.
thank you, and good luck -
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this poem is about this girl who's not really sure whether she likes him or not. But when she sees him with some one else she realizes that probably he's the one, but by then he kinda loses interest in her, and she hopes that someday(in the near future "OR"tomorrow) he'll come back to her.
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I think you could work on this a bit more and make it better. Its a good thought and a good idea... I just think you can improve it a bit more. Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest
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i enjoyed how you asked what took me so long twice it gave a nice effect.
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Thank you
i wasn't really sure whether anybody would even like it cuz this is my first poem.
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