Another town
no one knows me
a room that smells
of yesterday
a bathroom
where the mirror
shows
no tomorrow
make up cannot hide
the bruises
inside
A car
not much money left
time
to find a diner
a job
and freedom
This room
has nothing I want
after him
that's good enough.
A contest entry
- Woman in a motel by AJ Morelli.
2000 points, ended May 27, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like it. I think I know the perfect man for you.
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Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. I liked the imagery and thought behind it. Again, very well done.
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i see you are new to the site, so welcome...
i think this reads a bit like a list and needs a little connective tissue to hold it together... little edits would help clarify parts like:
"This room
has nothing I want
after him
that's good enough."
is cleaner as:
After him, this room
has nothing I want
that is good enough.
so nice to have you here in the contest, thanks
al
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So much said in so few words.To escape is enough.Freedom at last, Ros
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A lost soul on that lonely road... It's all open road from here!!! Very poignant piece!!!
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Thank-you.
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
Sadly, this is the life story of someone out there. You made it seem real. But I am glad it isn't personal to you.
Welcome to AP. If you have any questions or need help with anything, feel free to IM me.
Keep expressing through writing.
Storm
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Very sad.
Hope it's not a true story.
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No, never married, like men too much for that!
Besides I've only been to the States once.
Thank you for the praise though, I like writing sad poetry. I don't think I am much good at it though.
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