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Unfaithful Heart

 

 

 

 

Heavy doubt weighs on her mind

as she watches him walk away

his unfaithful heart worries her 

she can only hope that he

will change his foolish ways

 

Author notes

Prompt: Dark Picture
She Thinks Too Much by Asunder
Between 20-50 Words

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  • Rhyming From Rehab gold member
    May 12
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    excellent poem congrats to you on the HM


  • CinfullyDelicious gold member
    May 12
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    Oh to hope they will change their foolish ways..

    This actually has a great messge within the words etc..cause many im sure may have felt this way with the partner etc

    But cripes unfaithful...well I would worry me too lol

    Captured a lot within here, Thank you and Good luck


    Cindy


  • SuicidalLover silver member
    May 12
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    A great write there Jeremy. I wish you luck!
    ~Kystal Angel


  • unsigned gold member
    May 12

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    Oh very nice J....I took the moments perspective as well but I think that you captured it better than me my friend.

    Well done

    S