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Child's Play ?

Waiting, with deadly intent,
two hours the child
of nine spent
 rocking

in a chair he sat
surrounded by night,
quitely without light
musing.

Would the news
come by phone
while he was alone

gloating?

 

Or would the police arrive

 to tell him sadly

mom had died

driving?

 

And drunk it was true 

they wouldn't say

but he already knew.

Sighing

 

they wouldn't see

the smile that shouldn't be

hiddin inside as he

crying

 

told; the money

he had given

help send mom to heaven,

leaving

 

as she said she would

this nasty child

 who was good for

nothing.

 

The message finally came

stunned he fell

faint, half insane

listening

 

to talk of carnage

at the crash site,

on his childhood's last night.

 Dieing

 

three boys in a car

hit head on, but

mom was, thrown afar;

living.

 

Fifty years the child

has spent, each guilty

moment in repent,

grieving.

 

Author notes

April Nadeau: option # 11 there really is no end to violence, as my friend of forty years, though guilty only of intent, would testify; except that his final violence was against himself, so he can't..

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  • Hmm... i had to read this poem through a couple of times in order to appreciate the Poe-esque writing style, but once i did get the grasp i liked it very much. This poem is very well penned, and very heartwrenching. I thank you for sharing this in my contest.
  • alesana
    May 25
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    good

    i like the idea of the poem. it really set a mood and i could see every word

  • james119
    May 17

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    Reading this terribly tragic poem it strikes me how the young lad's attempt at revenge by using his own tormenter's hand was twisted so cruelly. I was at first taken so by the flow of the story that I couldn't focus on the poetic aspects.

    A couple of readings later, I can appreciate the natural rhyme and meter. The format is ideal with it's pauses and end rhyme, each accenting the words preceeding.

    Poe would have appreciated this one. I am sorry to read that the story is true.

    • Thanks for your thoughtful reading of this

      homage poem for my poor friend. You so often seem to read my mind. Of coures, this in based on Lenore. Clever of you to spot that.
  • wow this is very deep and meaningful made me stop and think
  • jo.k.

    This is deep. I'm a 63 year old man. Is this poem based on a personal experience? Yes, alot of kids gloat at the misfortunes of others, even those close to them. Rather a sad statement of man isn't it? And to cripple himself with guilt for having gloated. I would say something was missing from this relationship, wouldn't you?

    • I guess I didn't get the point across that the boy

      felt guilty for intentionally giving his drunk mother the money to drive away and thus have a crash which didn't kill her but 3 innocent bystanders. Kids may want to kill their parents opportunistically, but don't have the mental capacity to think out the possible consequences. Thaks for pointing this out to me I shall add the explination to the notes. Yes, it is.
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