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Sundown on Smiles

… and within the dusk of nightfall,
twilight seems to weave a collage of despair.

Why then that when the sun fades
smiles enter into sundown?

Is there not the knowing
that within the composition of dawn
Hope has always been there?

Author notes

Topic 6

I call this poem form 'the pearlcon' . Three stanzas: the 1st stanza provides the orientation; the second stanza a question, and the third stanza is an answer to the question in the second stanza, but also in question format. Important that thoughout the poem there is the link between nature and human nature, and that the final stanza should provide a positive outcome in the form of an inspiration / opportunity / principle.

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  • Riamh
    September 30, 2008

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    I like what this says....can't comment on the form, not being au fait with all the mechanics of poetry.
    Loved the effect and the sentiments expressed.
    Be well,
    Slayer


  • sOuL
    September 27, 2008

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    a very good poem
    i have no idea how to make a good comment on this poem
    but i am very happy that this poem has entered my contest
    surely a finalist


  • paperparadox silver member
    May 21, 2008

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    I love that 'there' rhymes with 'despair', rounding up the poem nicely. I also love the sheer delicacy of this form.

    Excellent poetic fare here. Thanks for sharing, and congratulations on the HM!


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 13, 2008

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    Oh I do like this form very much and will have to give it a whirl. Your message too, is one of hope and thoughtful courge. Nicely done. Thank you for sending this to the Titles group. ~Pamela


  • penman gold member
    May 12, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • myrataal silver member
    May 12, 2008
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    Ah Poet!

    This may well be a new form ... I loved the concise statement in the two entrance lines ... then the question, and another question, as the answer on the first ...

    Brilliant! Content AND structure. Give this form a name and coin it.

    Love
    Myra

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