My beloved ripped away from me
By your vicious clutch
I know she's begging to be free
She doesn't want your touch
A contest entry
- No Lies, Just Love... by Fallen Grace.
900 points, ended June 8, 2008, 31 entries
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Comments
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Its pretty cool,
but it just seems like a stanza not a whole poem
this would be a good start for a much longer poem,
it could be a lot more descriptive and emotional if you did make it longer
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It was supposed to be a full poem, but I couldn't finish it.
Honestly I can't write anymore and this was one of my last attepts at a poem. I get a few words down, and then it all falls apart and I can't finish it.
I used to write songs as well, now everything is either absolute garbage or I can't get more than two verses down.
I've decided to give up writing anything because its just not within my abilities anymore.
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Short and sweet, very emotional.
I realy like this poem and the power behind your words.
You did a wonderful job on writing this =]
Thank you for entering and Good luck in my contest!
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Beautifully-Bound
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