frozen in time
is my love for you
though your heart
has turned cold
the chill of tears flow
down my ashen face
frigid as winter
lacking the warmth of love
I miss the sunshine
inside your embrace
unbreak my heart
and just hold me
Author notes
Little Fish by `SeaFairy
http://www.deviantart.com/print/81745/
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt #2 - Quickie by marlene47.
600 points, ended May 14, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the "chill of tears flow," "the sunshine inside your embrace." A broken heart does feel this way. Nice take on the prompt. Thank you for your entry.
Marlene -
Aww.. this is gorgeous! Lovely imagery and just such a lonely write of wanting love back
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Thank you dear
I sure hope to have love back while I'm still young enough to enjoy it lol
Linda
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Ah..so much sentiments you have put in the immagery while your shoing pain..incredible indeed...touching piece..I love this verse..well done....
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Thank you so very much sir. I appreciate your kind words.
Linda
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Wow... what sadness and longing you've managed to portray... Not quite hankie time (LOL) but close... Beautiful take on the prompt... Wonderfully done.
K
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Now ain't you so kind Thank you dear.
Linda
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Beautiful sadness felt in this poem
Each stanza takes the reader and you can feel the emotions and the tears
Julie
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Aww thank you dear kind lady. Although I feel I was asleep when I wrote this lol sorta embarrassed I posted it. But there it is anyway.
Linda
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Sad and beautiful.
Best wishes in the contest.
Love Margaret
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Thank you, you're so sweet to say that.
Linda
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Ohhhhhhh, this is sooooooooo sad! I love it though...
what a great read!!
"I miss the sunshine
inside your embrace
unbreak my heart
and just hold me"
that verse really works, ties this whole thing together
quite nicely...
Best of luck in this contest!!
and love
Nyetta
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Thank you dear, although I have nooooo idea where this came from..nor do I know why I entered it
Quite lame isn't it but oh well.. I suppose I'm still searching for my lost muse. 
sure wish it would hurry and come back.
Linda
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