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Take My Hand

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Walk with me
along trodden paths

where lovers stroll,

where Summer’s heat
is calmed by willow’s shade

as soft zephyrs caress

and when we are weary,
let us rest upon sweet grass

with delicate feathered mimosa

and fragrant lilac standing
over us as I dotingly

wipe sweat from your upper lip.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • melphleg gold member
    June 2

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    Beautiful imagery in this piece. Reading this gives the reader a sense of peace and love. What a romantic setting you have created. It is no wonder you won silver.

  • Nicolette gold member
    May 15

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    So lovely and soft this is... like flower petals. And delightfully romantic - like love should be - and stay. Loved the colours and fragrances here... a gentle breeze of a love poem.

    ~ Nicolette


  • michelle-x-christine
    May 14
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    This is quite good. I like the imagery.


  • Amera gold member
    May 13

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    This is lovely, it's soft yet has that definite masculine touch. Actually only horses sweat, gentleman perspire and ladies glisten. Hehe….

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • ardentMarch gold member
    May 12

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    oh wow, this is beautiful -

    "and fragrant lilac standing
    over us as I dotingly

    wipe sweat from your upper lip."

    The whole poem - sweet, sensual, & that last line is very erotic! Best of luck in the contest..


  • fortyninereasons silver member
    May 12

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    It is cold here but your words warmed me up. Evoking thoughts of lazy summer afternoons. Well done and good luck. Juls


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 12

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    Definitely all about love and tender genuine feelings... just gorgeous!


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    May 12

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    Sigh...makes me think fo a spreading tree, and a blanket placed beneath, two people and well er...lets stop there shall we! Love, Chez


  • michellemybelle gold member
    May 11

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    A beautiful image of love and spring! Love the tender ending!
    Thank you for this lovely entry!
    Michelle

  • ashjoe76
    May 11

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    Brilliant

    very good word pictures...and melodious phrases. The last line is truly impressive. congrats and best regards!


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    May 11

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    Very nicely worded and full of love.

    Best wishes in the contest.

    Love Margaret

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