Tarnished.
Imperfect perfection,
exhausted hyperactivity.
No matter what the consequence
I'm just a contradiction.
Author notes
The last bit was my reason for choosing Tarnished as my word.
A contest entry
- Give me your best word. by m...c.
300 points, ended May 15, 2008, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be harsh, be specific.
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Wow it's very short... The title confused me until I read the poem. Very pretty really
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Well I am sure that many people may be confused of the many one worded poems being posted on this site. But I enjoy reading each and every one. Your word brings a meaning to a life that is great. You say "Imperfect perfection," as well as "exhausted hyperactivity." Would not then your "Tarnished" life be brightened in this darkened world? Just a thought.
Thank you for your word Tarnished. -
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I find the word Tarnish a contradiction actually. It's used to brighten up a dull world so thus
Exhausted hyperactivity
but it's not real. It's imperfect, an add on.
Hope that explains it.
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The first line 'Tarnished' (same as your title, obviously) has an element of "Nice, but not needed." If you ousted that one-word line, it wouldn't really affect your poem. With the line intact (as it is now), it doesn't really do anything for me.
"I'm just a contradiction."
I adore this line, although I question whether it was a natural wording process for this to have accidentally rhymed with 'perfection'. I don't like rhyme when it's intentional (my rhymes are rare and never intentional), but this is a really good line full of self-conflict. -
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=P That was because the thing is for a contest. I just made my explanation into a tiny poem.
Tarnished was my word to explain myself and situation.
That rhyme wasn't intentional Oo.. Then again I'm forever using words with Tion at the end.
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