If murder were legal,
you'd so be long gone.
You are not my brother;
just my mother's son.
No longer my family,
'cause you're an ass.
and this hate for you;
it is spreading fast.
Fucked without intercourse;
that's what Momma says.
You are such a prick,
Everyone hates your ass.
Author notes
I was just pissed off so here we go
My brother is telling lies about me to our mom trying to make her mad at me. I am glad my mom knows better but it still makes me mad
option 3
A contest entry
- vent it out 2! by Lsh-x.
300 points, ended August 29, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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what does this have to do with being bi-polar? It is filled with anger and hate. More of a vent really, but I see to relationship here with bi-polar disorder.
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It always amazes me the anger that can grow and fester in families. Hate once germinated is hard to uproot and, yes, there truly are some assholes and some of them occur "in the best of families" as my old Grandma used to say.
I enjoyed your write.
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Wow.
Looks like your brothers a badd'un.
This is such a powerful write, I can really feel your hatred. Don't let it mess you around sweetie.
Thanks for entering.
Good luck. -
my condolences
sounds like you have scum for a brother, there.
i don't blame your anger at all! i hate it when people fail to be considerate of others. what kind of personal benefit is making someone else feel like shit, that's all i'd like to know.
i hope the wounds of this anger heal quickly, friend. best wishes. -
Woo ! I really liked this! So full of raw emotion and anger and HATE. Niccce. Every once in awhile you need to rant and vent through poetry, and this was done excellently. haha. I liked this alottt. Thanks for entering & best of luck to you ! ♥
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ouch at least your mom is smart enoughto see the truth behind him
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Intense. I liked it overall but the background didnt fit too well. I am a very astetic person. I like how you called your brother "your mother's son" It was a very strong and powerful write.
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Certainly intense in its angry expression of hate. Very raw and very open.
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wow what an intense piece.I love how you kept it short, adds to the hatred towards your 'mother's son' as it seems that you didnt want to make it into a long piece because he isnt worth writing about.
awesome use of language.
I especially love the line
'You are not my brother;
just my mother's son.'
Thankyou for entering
All the best
~Hollow~
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Great write with good imagery on the prompt...
sorry your brother can not see better sense, but really glad your mother can!
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This was great, the anger is evident- but also has a cleansing feel! I especially love the lines:
"You are not my brother;
just my mother's son."
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Ah...sibiling rivialy.
I'm glad you entered. It's a great write. I asked and you gave. Thank you.
...ne way I will give you a chance. You need to put the prompt in the AN as well. If you don't I will remove the poem.
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Family dynamics really suck sometimes, but like they say you don't get to pick your relatives. I liked some of your phrasing very much, esp. you are not my brother just my mothers son". Good job.
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I agree with the advice. Suck should be such, but I can feel your anger oozing out, none the less. Warm wishes in the contest.
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suck maybe should be such...Just an idea. This was indeed a pissed off piece. Thanks for sharing and best of luck
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