Precious pulse
sputters;
death
regurgitated.
Author notes
Prompt: knife
Five words only!
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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This brings forth deep imagery and emotion, Belle. You've expressed much in these five words.
Dee
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This was really well done.
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Oh my goodness! All the imagery, emotions, sense of pain... in five words. Brilliant! I read this three times, and got three different perspectives. I can feel the piercing here.
I Love YOU ♥
Mom
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very nice!
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pithy. i like the separated pairings, reinforces the severing, cutting action of the sharp end of a blade. -silverpiscean
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i missed commenting on this...I like where you went with this....and says so much in so few... Bel
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I like this...
A lot..
I suppose I normally use too many words,
Because, where mine didn't,
This feels complete.
Well done.
-Saint
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WOW, this is amazing. I am in complete and total awe. You said so much with only 5 words. I wiish I couuld write like this.
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Ewww. This poem was sick. The word regurgitated pops this vivid vision of like, blood showering from someone's neck. Sick. But great.
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i love the word 'regurgitated'. haha
good luck in the contest.
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wow. this was powerfully ripe with visual imagery. Superb job.!
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taiinfinite
life, losing life, and death, givin in a panoramic veiw, stunning
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NICE. These five words were rife with imagery. Your use of "regurgitated" was phenomenal. I loved this!
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Wow Bel
Five words and you have really captured the idea of the title and I can really see how it relates to the word prompt. I don't know if I would be able to do it in five words
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Oh...very nice choice of words there missy! I congradulate you. *claps* I wish you luck!
~Kystal Angel
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wow, i really liek this, its awesome. lovely write and i can feel the dread, yay!
take care and good luck
stephanie
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