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{boxed words & hungry worms}



My in-box is
blackened


 

decayed, rancid...

 

secrets
locked


password protected...

 

rotting words
lie in

digital coffin.

 

 

 

Food for virtual worms.

Author notes

PROMPT: a little black box

what’s in it?

20 words
Be creative.

(my first ever attempt at a word counted poem....yikes...written for Dalaneys contest that closed for judging before I could post, Damn it!)

http://allpoetry.com/contest/2404377


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Comments

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  • Rovingone gold member
    June 22
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    I had a little black box once. Then I trashed the computer, for freezing up on me all the time. Really cute!

  • mrme
    June 15
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    bravo

    3 clappies deserving


  • NeonRose silver member
    June 9

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    Oh, boy! I know exactly how you feel! I have a file of 'quickie' poems that have missed the deadline! **
    It's a shame this did, for I am sure it would have scored a trophy! Very clever and compact!


  • james119
    June 1
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    this is at once light, angry and fun
    I like it a lot


  • Killerzombies
    May 26
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    Sucks it didnt make the contest because this is awesome, great take on it.

  • angelcalled666
    May 23

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    lol

    love it


    <3


    like always

    you have a lovely way at looking at things.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 23

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    This is brilliant!! Shame it didn't get into Lane's contests! Ahh I think we all have those little black boxes...


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 21

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    ...and I could read you all day long, too. I truly am a fan, Jamie. Your writing is a gift. Take it easy, and I'll be by again soon. Love, Lane


  • Sgt B silver member
    May 21

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    HMmmmmm

    Deep meanings here, I like the parable use here kind of a high tech Gothic view. Good job in presentation. I have been doing some word or line limited poems as of late & yes they are tough. I tend to like to spin a loooooooong yarn. Good job I enjoyed this one.


    ~Ron~

  • dillpickle62
    May 17
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    Great little poetic...

    twenty word count. Little black box. Um...


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    May 16

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    Marvelous! Your extended metaphor was unusual and interesting. You carried it through perfectly until the image packed ending. Well done!


  • Patpowers gold member
    May 14

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    Good work Jamie! You were really cretive with this! THANKS SO MUCH!!!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    May 14

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    Aw, sorry you did not make the contest in time, but this is quite good dear.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.

  • Rudolf
    May 12

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    my twenty words sense

    this was a winner I will let it be known
    when jamie writes twenty words its a hell of a poem...
    rudolf


  • Cinnarry gold member
    May 11
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    delicious

  • writingdelight silver member
    May 11

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    Short, sweet, powerful. You did wonderfully stepping outside of your box. Too bad you missed the contest, but at least you got a great poem out of it!!!

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