He lost his lily-white wings,
untouched by corruption or imperfection; above reproach:
But the thorns of the underworld mutated him.
He saunters through our minds - The Devil.
I live in a dictatorship.
Far from centers of human population.
I live in fear.
For I do not belong with such savages.
But would the unclampment of my wings truly set me free ?
The pure beings who bask in the clouds
would be unfamiliar with the stench of hatred
that permeates my scaley skin.
To continue life in hell,
or be Heavens anomoly ?
Author notes
Prompt 4.
Time
A contest entry
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Comments
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So many questions that can never truly be answered, beautiful.
A wonderfull write and I wish you all the best in the contest.
Rose -
Very interesting
Congrats on the gold. Very interesting imagery indeed. I enjoyed it, and I absolutely love your last line! Kudos, mate!
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Good
This was a good poem, it used very good imagery and words that were very interesting. I enjoyed reading your poem!
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I like this one, it makes me think...you used a great use of words here and I loved how you ended it.
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Very interesting take on the prompt! I like how it's not like the others I have read so far in this contest, Instead, it is sort of more of an afterlife's version of their afterlife. If that makes sense. I love the lines about the untouched angel wings - it seemed to make it all the more genuine. Thank you for entering my contest, and best of luck to you in having done so!!
Alex -
Wow. I loved the interesting perspective you took on the prompt here! I would have expected a person to be stuck in limbo or something who wants to get out, but you took an entirely different spin on it! I love the idea of the fallen angels and this captures their essence beautifully, because they too are stuck in an afterlife in which there is no escape. Who can ask for more from a poet than to think outside of the box? Good luck in the contest!
Sincerely,
ModernXTimes -
*tears* Wow. I like the thought of fallen angels, not that their outcasts, but just the thought. I like this poem. Bravo!
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