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Breathing

Scarlet tubes snake beneath,
muffled rhythms chase
your heartdance,
lids hesitantly flicker then fade.
A melancholic
undulation pants out elongated gasps
seconds squeeze, until
it is complete and memory falls
to oblivion.

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  • Pollycheck
    May 12, 2008
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    Thank you for entering my short poems contest. This reminded me of a poem that would be describing the throes of passion.


  • aliceramone
    May 11, 2008
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    a good piece and I dig the end lines...thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.