Happiness is
an adventure untasted, distilled and imperfect,
an Everest expedition without oxygen,
a jungle trek into unchartered hearts,
an unpersonned spaceflight floating to
the stars, but less
than you.
No map can guide, no satellite can lead, two
uninitiated explorers treading softly
along the undreamt path of us.
A contest entry
- Happiness by Nomadic Prince.
550 points, ended May 15, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - bored... by dramaiswhatever.
550 points, ended May 24, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I need something inspiring... by Megy206.
525 points, ended June 14, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Supe imagery and metaphor. Loved this. I especially liked the lines:
'No map can guide, no satellite can lead, two
uninitiated explorers treading softly'
What a lovely description of love. Thank you for sharing.
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Excellent
A very fine write indeed. I thought you expressed your ideas quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done. -
Thank you for entering the contest, happiness definitely is a big subject matter. Good luck in the contest!
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nice poem
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Very interesting and well-worded "No map can guide...along the undreamt path of us." I'm not sure I understand from the write how you know the "untasted" high adventures will definitely converge upon Happiness. I really enjoyed the concluding stanza.
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interesting explanation. welcome to the contest!
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Great descriptions. It was all expressed very well and the flow was great! Stellar write! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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I like the descriptions you made, "an Everest expedition without oxygen,/a jungle trek into unchartered hearts," I thought they were awesome... And they really make sense. And Happiness really is like that...
This is a really good poem.
Best of luck in the contest you are in 
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