Thorns rip, brambles tear
~hair streams wildly behind
Crashing through and around trees
chased by something yet unseen
Blood stream's off wounded skin
urgency to run growing strong
Pot was empty, gold was gone
feeling frightened, feeling watched
Laughter echoes through the brush
unnerving sounds that terrify
Pushing forward best I can
past the place where sanity lies
Above the thicket, rainbow looms
I can't escape its glaring stare
Running, falling, caught and then
curiosity has claimed its prize
A contest entry
- promt/ rainbows and blood by tainfinite.
800 points, ended May 24, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please be courteous and comment..NO rude or critical critiques please.
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This is a real dark and sad write, great use of the prompt. I too now will only admire them from afar!
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Ohhh nice pic
...you put both in there so well..and I like the ending ...I do love the saying curiousity killed the cat...so having that there struck a chord with me 
Wonderfully written, thank you and good luck
Cindy
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Girl this is awesome. You did a fantastic job of combinding the promt.
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Thanks!
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whew
what great pull this poem has. wonderfully easy to follow through and share in its emotions. very very good -
Great write where the reader can visualize the scene and feel the terror through your words. Well done!
I guess the motto is: Enjoy rainbows from afar. Don't approach the leprechauns' stash of cash!
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