A sad curtain crept over my town
On May 9, 2008 -last night
Every home and person filled with sorrow
Two families left, dreading tomorrow.
That malicious Grim Reaper he took the train
Riding Metro North with devilish intent
And by that unfortunate hand he would take
Two young lives, as that train failed to brake.
Rest in Peace Connor and Chris
You will never be forgotten, always in our prayers
Goodness gracious what a tragedy this has to be
Stolen from what lives they had, way too early.
Author notes
I didn't know them as well as I should have
But I will never dodge past them in the hallway
Or see those faces, ever again.
Why did this have to happen to two fifteen year olds
Stolen before their years- RIP
-angi terese
A contest entry
- In The End It Was...... by thegoldenpath.
500 points, ended May 24, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for the poem entry. So sorry about your loss. Shancy.
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Nice tribute....sad event....good poem
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"On may 9,2008 -last night" - should be a space between the comma and "2008".
Other than that, a nice poem that you have written here.
-Nam
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Thank you I missed that bit too. ^-^
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3xBravo!
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This sounds like a terrible tragedy and I'm so sorry. It's always hard to deal with death even if you didn't know them that well. You did a great job writing this.
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I really enjoyed this.. you did a wonderful job..
The imagery was really vivid and the flow in your words really brought the reader into your write..
Thanks for sharing.. Best of luck.
Angel
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very nice short is better than long just like salerno keeps saying lol
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Sorry for the loss even though you didn't really know them it still always sucks when people die thanks for the poem.
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Excellent write and story in this
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Very touching, you use your words to convey emotions brilliantly. Great piece.
-BON*BON
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This is indeed an intriguing piece revealing the truth of this life..thanks for sharing it..and sending it to my contest...
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Congrats on making it into the finalists list, this means i read on further than the first four lines of your poem. Thanks for entering =] xx
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Oh. Wow... I really love how you penned this one. Very professionally -- however that might be. It just felt like you had a grasp upon exactly how you wanted to say it, and you really did say it.
This is excellent. Wonderfully done
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