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The Constant Sound, Sapphic Ode (Pope Style)

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The endless sound, tick tock, tick tock
persistently filling the mind,
the beating of your own life’s clock,
a constant grind.

No chance to stop the hands of time
each minute cuts you like a knife,
it seems that life’s an endless climb
and mortal strife.

Each tick a step toward your death,
each tock will feed upon your soul,
they strip you of the vital breath
that makes you whole.

Your thoughts and deeds are ruled by time,
the constant stream of sands run down,
too soon your life is past it’s prime,
you wear a frown.

Enjoyment of your life’s a must
for seconds will soon pass you by,
your memories soon turn to dust
and then you die!

 

 

 

 



 

Author notes

Sapphic Ode (Pope Style)
Three line iambic tetrameter
fourth line iambic bimeter
or
three line 8 syllables
fourth line 4 syllables

Rhymed abab, as many stanzas as you like.

Prompt...Time

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Comments

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  • Amera gold member
    May 28
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    This is beautiful Sue, I see why it won gold. Fluid with wonderful imagery.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Arkbear gold member
    May 27

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    Hi Sue :)

    You would never know the Prompt and Form were not made for each other....you have not only penned a nice write, but managed to keep your Flow & Tone throughout your Form constant and concise :)

     

    Well deserved Trophy and sure looks good with a Gold sitting there!

     

    Well done,

     

    Bear ~

  • Well done, Sue

  • Congratulations

    Well done with a terrific poem. I will have to try this form. Superb to read and enjoy and so good to see it adorned with a beautiful gold trophy in this contest. ~Pamela


  • blondone silver member
    May 24

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    Oh this is striking, powerfully written the words flow with ease one of the things I have done with this Big Dog contest were to pick a form new to me and try it I so love this one its at the top of my learning list the imagery is outstanding true talent flows thank you for entering ... grand take on the prompt

  • Oh wow!! Beautiful form... achingly sad poem about how we all crumble across time!!

    Outstanding Sue... I really love this!!

  • I will not pretend I understand this form as you know me and forms dont mix but the poem itself is wonderful all the best Brian

  • Rudolf
    May 17

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    Timeless review

    Well for some ones whose struggling you appear to have hit a grand slam.
    I for one will go out on a limb and say that your have timed a golden plan.
    rudolf

  • ...anxious to see this one...
  • Ohhh let me know when this is done Sue!

  • blondone silver member
    May 10
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    Your prompt will be: Time

    Takes this where you wish and
    Thank you for the form looking forward to the read...

  • blondone silver member
    May 10
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    You got me on this form I've not heard os seen this one before and I looked on shadowpoetry.com can't find it so I don't know what prompt to give or how to judge please send form info Please....
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