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Saturday Night and the Girl is Hot

 

 

the Northern Pub on Tib Street

takes the odd/odd guests:

usually Saturday/Sunday morning shags

or Angeline; when she's fucked-one-over on Sol

 

the world crumbles around her ears.

 

the attic room, has a balcony

looks out onto Oldham street, below

Ang flicks Sobranie ash on top of the revellers, raggamuffins;

scallies and disorderly conductors.

 

wads a stick of gum

smooths her leathers, 

unscrews Jack,

welcomes him to her mouth,

 

wishes the stains on the bedspread

were a world away from her bruised heart.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

purely fictional ... Angeline's last outing maybe for a bit....... she needs a vacation

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  • LadyLavender gold member
    May 27
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    congrats! A fine write indeed!


  • Zayra
    May 27
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    Fantastic Gill

    Bravo!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    May 27

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    Unusual theme - can she see t'Latics' floodlights from her window? Fine poem - congratulations on the silver.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 27
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      not from there, but when i was a young staff nurse at Boundary Park Hospital where i trained, my room from the nurses home, looked out onto the Latics ground.. and what fun we used to have back then


  • ardentMarch gold member
    May 27
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    I hope you do write more Angeline poems soon - I love them..congrats, Gill

  • AJ Morelli gold member
    May 27
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    very well done Gill, a fine entry here...

    wonderfully descriptive, a contender for sure



    al

  • Cat gold member
    May 17
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    i will miss her- look forward to her return..
    the slut!

    wonderful poetry.


  • Luna Tique Fringe gold member
    May 13

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    love the 'disorderly conductors' and of course
    "unscrews Jack,
    welcomes him to her mouth,"


  • misselaineous gold member
    May 11
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    gin on tib sheet?
    wonderful musings hun


  • EvilKate gold member
    May 11

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    Wow hun - you've got it ... and from all angles, it doesn't look like leaving any day soon

    "the top attic room" ... perhaps I am ignorant of Manchester construction ... but, are there attics that aren't at the top of the building? Maybe you crazy Englunders build some attics in the basement? I really have no idea, which is why I ask - and, in any case, a minor point, but it did niggle a bit.

    The whole, however, as always - bliss!


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    May 10

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    Lol Unlike the Manchester I remember but that was over 5 years ago so when I return there next year I must take a harder look Love, C


    • NurseChilly gold member
      May 11

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      well if you're here, then a few oesophageal lavages will be partaken of, in some local hostelry..

      hehehhehe

      yes indeed

      • Cannonsfire silver member
        May 11
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        LOL Well I will have to take you up on that one, never let it be said that an Aussie travelling cannot find a pub in the dark or even in Manchester! Love, C

  • ardentMarch gold member
    May 10

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    I love this series. I can see her so clearly on the balcony...and I love her character. This is excellent, as always...the ending two lines are powerful.


  • dehydrated
    May 10

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    "unscrews Jack" the last two stanzas are too SHE WOMAN-ish!!!!


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 10

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    I agree with Nicolette...damn, it's a boring Saturday and a hot one too, and I find I want to be in an English pub more than anything - you know how to pull a reader into your imagination quite well, darling. Love, Lane


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 10

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    "unscrews Jack,
    welcomes him to her mouth"

    Man! Now you make me read something like this on a saturday afternoon I agree with Kathleen... you're so damn deliciously and almost diabolically good, Gilly!! I for one will miss Angeline - but I know she will be busy making a certain man dive for muffs elsewhere



    ~ Nicolette

  • individuality gold member
    May 10

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    ah tib street, and town, i have not been in a pub up town for ages, too hectic up there for such a quiet soul as I


  • Lucy. gold member
    May 10

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    unscrews Jack, yes, loved that bit too!
    Fictional, uhuh. Very creative!


  • Rowan gold member
    May 10

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    damn.

    as in damn, you're good, Angeline deliciously bad.
    I love; "unscrews Jack"
    lol.

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