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Room 104




She grapples with concepts
of genuine
white light
or Bengal illumination.


Her face
of a thousand strikes.
In a dream
                 in a motel

 

 

Vacancy

 

 

 

 

is a pseudo for eyes.


~

A contest entry

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  • AJ Morelli gold member
    May 27

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    really nice one... love the strong opening stanza...

    i like the second one too...lol

    as Mary said, great take on the prompt and a fine entry here...

    thanks

    al

  • Zayra Yves gold member
    May 22
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    I love the way you write.



  • Cat gold member
    May 17
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    wonderful use of vacancy- what
    a great take on the prompt!

    Mary


  • Allyce May
    May 13

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    Raaaaaaa! Not entering. One of these days, I am going to be this good and enter all the contests with the BIG GUNS, heh heh

    In many ways, it makes me happy to read poetry this good, with such impact; BUT, on the other hand, IT DEPRESSES ME! I have a longgggg way to go

    Just fabbbbb, the ending was cracking


    • Rowan gold member
      May 13
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      Girl, you have more talent in your lil pinky, then I do on a good day. lol. You have to enter, keeps me humble. Your talent scares me, in a good way. Love ya, kiddo.

  • Luna Tique Fringe gold member
    May 13
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    wow...


  • Amera gold member
    May 12

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    Wonderful with percise vivid imagery. I love this: "Bengal illumination" Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Jersene silver member
    May 12
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    Excellent


  • Cinnarry gold member
    May 11
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    sigh...oh sigh, sigh, sigh,,,my Row-row!


  • misselaineous gold member
    May 11
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    loved this

    elaine


  • EvilKate gold member
    May 11

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    Good lordy you're good. I have this contest bookmarked (and now this entry) and once again I am swimming in your wake

    But that is okay - the water here is warm


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 10

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    Poor AJ is going to have a tough time judging this contest...marvelous writing here, my friend. Love, Lane


    • Rowan gold member
      May 12
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      Thank you laney.
      Al's contest always pull in some fabulous writes. Off to go read some.

  • NurseChilly gold member
    May 10

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    superb... superb.. infact tis the dog's bollocks.. yes

    damn, the little ditty i had going for this, is now in the bin..

    aaahhh... shall try to out do you.. lmao.. not not..damnit, i hate/love you!


    • Rowan gold member
      May 10
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      go away....

      hehehehe. Oh, I have no doubt you'll out-do me, hon.
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