You walked away that night,
And took my heart with you.
You said I love you with your eyes,
And with your next words,
I hate you..,
My heart breaks every-time I see your face..
But you walk away,
Only to show up again stamping your mark on my heart..
I know what this is
And yet I can't tell you no.. My heart is nonexistent,
Because I can't let you go..
Author notes
Prompt two is:
"How many times will I go and take the bait, Only for this hook to rip right through my face"
Flyleaf - Sleepwalker & Whispering fingertips
10 poets.
10 lines
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie! by LeilaJayne.
300 points, ended May 10, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Emotional
Aww dear sister. This is so sad. Congrats on winning silver
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This is 11 lines now, lol, but dont worry about it ill let u off hehe. Nice work, very good take on the prompt i love it! x
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sad
but you wrote it with real depth, and I suspect an experience not too easy to get over with. lots of luck in the contest.
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HEARTBREAKING!!!!!!
One cannot change what ones heart feels, one just has to go on and accept what the heart cannot throw away.
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lol copier geez hahahaha jk it's close but urs is written way better I love it yay!!!!!!!!! hehe =)
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Aww so sad sis! You know, I have so been in that place where I should have let someone go as they were hurting me, but didn't have the courage! Never ends well...
True emotion in this!
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Ouch! that hurts can feel the pain
Swallow hard its choking
Good luck in the contest hun
Julie xx
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I asked for 10 lines..this is only 8...let me kno when u have edited it =] xxx
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Sorry about that.. I'm done.. I'm sleep deprived! so it's not that great! and I would write it after I feel asleep I just don't know when i would wake up! so sorry if it sucks!!=P
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Its very good. I like the change of pace with your lines. Usually its destracting but with the way you worded it it transitions nicely. And using that prompt you have done well. Very good poem
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Lol.. well this is different! a comment from you! yay!lol. sorry I'm a little sleep deprived.. But I'm glad that you liked this.. I don't think that it goes with the prompt at all, but thats just me.. thank you for your comment..
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hehehe yay!!
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Lol.. well I'm sleepy!!
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What? But you never sleep!!
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I can't keep my eyes open!!! me sleepy!! can I sleep sis? please!!? I'll do the contest but if she puts the prompt up and judges before I wake up don't be mad at me!!!
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Aww sis! Go sleep!!!
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ok.. I'm off to bed then!! love ya sis!!! night night..
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Night sis!
ya
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