Inner demons battle,
fighting for control of my volatile craze.
You...never understanding...
...feed me emotions that cripple and daze.
Love and understanding
leave these swollen eyes in a haze.
I never asked for your pity...
So, stop being so fucking polite!
Back away with your sympathetic bullshit,
my delusions are not yours tonight!
Author notes
Prompt three is:
"In a sick way I want to thank you for holding my head up late at night. While I was busy waging wars on myself, you were trying to stop the fight"
Blue October - Hate Me.
Love this song...third time I am writing on it...lol
Hate me for all the things I didn't do for you!...
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie! by LeilaJayne.
300 points, ended May 10, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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ooh.. I like This!!! All full of
Anger!! good stuff I'm glad that you won gold brother!
this was way worthy of it!
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wow that tells her !
The anger overflowing the raw revenge seeking
the last stanza really does hit with a punch
Luv ya Bro
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wasn't that sweet?
hahahahaha......great write and good luck in the contest
take care daddy
stephanie
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Wow, this is such a great take on the prompt, and I agree, this song is amazing. It really touches some part of me. and I see in the comments you dont feel this way towards your mother, good now that is out of the way, so well done to you. This is really a great write and I wish you all the best in the contest.
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I did when I was around 16-25 but whats the point now I am 40+..lol...I just love this song...
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Whoa!!! That's very upfront indeed!! I love it!! Good on you bro... awesome job on that prompt!
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hope she never reads it....it wasn't for her....I love my mom...lol
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Good luck brother!!
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