Oh god I want my breath to be the gentle breeze that appeases him when he's feeling alone and depressed...for my arms to be the sun that nurtures his soul when nothing but rain as heavy as lead falls on him...my heart to be the heart that beats next to his,...beat....beat...beat...like a drum that's heard by the early rising sun in the empty plains all across the world. I want my eyes to belong to only his eyes...
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful
Hello Dear Poet,I have just finished reading this poem and wish to let you know just how much I have enjoyed the read.You have penned a beautiful piece here.It has blown me away.It is filled with so much love and devotion.The reader can 'feel' these emotions that you have woven within your words.The visuals within the write also play a major part of being a great poem to read.Your words are soft and so tender, just like the way a love poem should be written.Your words are full of description and awesome visulization.I tried to pinpoint some lines that stood out the most for me, what reached out and pulled me into your tapestry of woven words, I re-read you, and still I couldn't decide, as I adore the whole poem.You have an incredible way with words.You have been a pleasure to read my friend.
Take care and many beautiful blessings to you.
~Angel~
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This is very beautiful. I love how you used nature in the peice.
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Now this is nice.
Another nice one to read this early in the morning. I think perhaps you captured the beauty of what it means to have your waking in the morning with him. And letting the sun go down as well.
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