Tranquil surroundings.
Beauty astounding.
Magick ashore,
fragrant and pure.
Fluid abundant.
Flora redundant.
Sweet blossoms scent the sable air,
in a world beyond repair.
She cries for the losses,
and those yet to come.
Mourning for life,
her fears she will sum.
She'll string them together,
and sing them out clear.
Rhyming plea will resound,
and be clinched with a tear.
Lonely enchantment,
to inspire enhancement.
Searching for truths
to be passed onto youth.
Trapped but working
against darkness lurking.
Ever will she strive,
to keep our Earth alive.
Author notes
Carp fairies by hiliuyun
http://hiliuyun.deviantart.com/art/Carp-fairies-74018967
I love faeries...
4 lines over, and if you won't accept that, please overlook the final four lines, and place a "still" before "Searching" in the "second last" line... please.
^.^
Ever humble and hopeful...
Enjoi.
A contest entry
- PIF *Quickie* Picture by SuicidalLover.
450 points, ended May 10, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critique Me!!! (bash my poem, I'll bash you...)
Comments
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I don't know if I wanna critique....you'll bash me!
Alas, this is my job. A great poem in form. It really helps when you have rythme. Even if you went over the line limt,(I don't think you did :S ) I thank you for entering! 
~Kystal Angel
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