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Dancing on the Moon

 

 

 

I remember the first time

we made love it was like

dancing on the moon…

 

or at least, that’s how I

imagined it, effortless

as we did glide through

 

an atmosphere of pleasure,

in each other’s arms, bodies

floating free, or at least,

 

that’s how I imagined it as

an air of serenity abounded

between each held breath, yes,

 

it was beautiful, and the stars

shone so very brightly in the deep

space of your eyes, that night~

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

'Welcome home, Dalaney."
Dedicated to all the romantics out there.

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  • alexandrathegreat gold member
    June 10

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    Imagining can come true in your heart. Dreams are mmor precious than all. Thank you for waiting patiently I've been so busy.

  • Bad Bill
    May 20
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    This is spot on, MJ. No complications, just a beautiful poem.

    Bill


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 14

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    Truly a magic moment...
    Excellent work. ~Pamela

  • ashjoe76
    May 11

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    Very Good

    soooooo beautiful...the imagery is superb, but even better is your refrain..."ir at least, that's how I imagined it"...Very well done, friend.
    Congrats and Best Regards!


  • fortyninereasons silver member
    May 10

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    Such soft silky words here MJ. Love the lines:
    an air of serenity abounded
    between each held breath, yes,

    lovely dedication. Juls

  • ardentMarch gold member
    May 10

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    lovely...


  • Amera gold member
    May 10

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    You my friend are becomming a master of imagery. This poem flows through the mind like the dance you depict. I think what sets this apart from any old descriptive poem is your repitition of the phrase "I imagined it". By doing that, you sealed it in the reader's mind.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • RedAquarius gold member
    May 10

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    Very sensual and soft, I especially liked the deep space of eyes, as if they were their own galaxy. Lovely visual. Lane will love it!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 9

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    Oh what a stunning piece! Gorgeous! I know she will love this!

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