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Happy birthday to you...

Sweetest frosting
ever did live
cannot conceal
the retched bitterness.

Author notes

I would like to send out my solemn apology to OhEmetophobia for not being able to read and entering her contest wrong the first time. Lo siento.

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 10, 2008

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    Excellent!! I love the metaphor of the frosting! Ahh sweetness cannot hide bitterness indeed!

    • abyssal
      May 10, 2008
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      Ah, thank-you very much for your kind words.


  • broken-colours
    May 9, 2008

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    Now this is fantastic! What a bittersweet ending.. with well-chosen words to accent it.. Nice job! Thanks for entering. And no need to apologise, it's fine. :]