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Surrender

 

  In the alluring embrace

  of moon's magnificence

  I bathe blissful

 

  Captivated by celestial

  carnality

  I surrender to my

           sensual splendour

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Pic, 20 words
Artist credit:
Anqet, Goddess of the Nile by *ThornErose


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A contest entry

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Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression? Line numbers
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Comments

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  • unsigned gold member
    May 13
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    So do I but always on my own...lol

    Should have been gold!

    Simon

  • crimsondew silver member
    May 13
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    Wow

    wonderful....a trophy so well deserved.....beautiful imagery...


  • Leila
    May 13

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    I just had to ask the mother was one of the words meant, too early in the morning for me to think But its great, such depth, congrats on the shiny =] x


  • poppa silver member
    May 12

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    Lovely write with a very sensual flavour.....congrats on the trophy


  • runewalker
    May 12

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    Celestial Carnality .... nice turn of image and alliteration. Opens of vista of swooping images, and makes us take in a sharp breath ... or maybe take a cold shower?

    Beautiful piece....
  • Hey, can I be a part of that?? lol.

    You go girl.

  • Jackie,congrats on the bronze

    Love the way you surrended.

  • Very nicely done. Quite fitting with the pic and sensual, indeed. Loved this:
    "Captivated by celestial
    carnality"
    Congrats on the bronze.....


  • marlene47 silver member
    May 11

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    Loved it, especially the moon's embrace and your surrender.
    Congratulations on bronze.
    Marlene

  • Weltt gold member
    May 10

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    Grats On The Bronze!!!!!

    A very vivid and fresh sensual piece you have created. Loved the flow of this. Seemed to just pour off the page. Great use of alliteration throughout. nicely done!!


  • Hekate gold member
    May 10

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    Ah yes totally beautiful
    Just to think that when we do meditations that we can actually have that place to surrender in! This was very calming.
    Congrats on the bronze!

  • Who wouldn't?

  • Aww! this is beautiful. I love the sensual write. You have written this perfectly for the prompt. Congrats on the Bronze!

  • Enchanting my dear...and congrats on the bronze!


    Love and peace always,
    mj.


  • buffsab99 silver member
    May 10

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    Beautiful

    celestial carnality - I love it. Wonderfully written.

  • WOW yes hun this brilliant, the flow of beautiful words that
    fit so well the image
    Good luck in the contest
    Julie

  • penman gold member
    May 10
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    excellent

    What a great take on the picture. So very well done. Congrats on the bronze.

  • Congrats on the bronze!

    Enchanting words you've penned here. Lovely take on the picture. Again such smooth flow and alliteration, gorgeous to read. Congrats on the bronze


  • arafura
    May 10
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    Very smooth and sensual... a worthy trophy winner indeed!

  • Love the alliteration...the last four lines are exquisite!  Lovely! Thank you for your entry.  Just a friendly reminder to please give artist credit in your AN.

    Ash

  • omg omg...ur so going to win lol

    this is just amazingly beautiful SiS


    Love U
    Good luck

    Cin

  • beautiful, i think this is what i was going for but couldn't get out lol. well done, hope you get a shiney

    Tasha

  • This entire poem is alluring...! Haha. I love your pseudo-alliteration (e.g. 'moon's magnificence' 'sensual splendour') and your easy and effortless flow. There's nothing stilted or awkward about your poetry...do you know how insanely rare that is?

    Anyways, my favorite line would have to be the uno-worded "carnality"...Gosh, what does that mean anyways? LoL I'm gonna dictionary.com/ it
  • I like yours a lot hahaha can't touch yours hahaha lol

  • Ooh.. this was really nice!!! I really liked this sis!! you always do so great with prompts like these!! well done! best of luck!!

  • Bob Fox
    May 9
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    Jackie

    just maybe why your are the honest number o nAP


  • Cerulean gold member
    May 9
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    celestial carnality = v e r y nice


    Good work sis!

    • lol.. wasn't even sure if that made sense Thanks bro!

      • Cerulean gold member
        May 9

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        Course it did... when I read that I thought, "Bliss of sensual rapture" But then I am always thinking that way. lol
  • I'm waiting!!!! lol

  • Cerulean gold member
    May 9
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