I want it so bad, yet I have no way to get it
The nervousness and tension(is too much to bear)
Never can I say a word(just awe in your presence)
Blushing and sweating(thinking of what I would do to you)
S o
S l o w l y
I try to calm the fear
I try so hard to impress you[and end up failing]
I try to be myself[and end up running away]
You don't even know what goes on inside my head
How much I wish to be close to you(maybe in the bed)
I love you so much more than I can describe
Fear is what keeps me from being with you(though I try to be brave)
This inexplainable love is totally yours
A contest entry
- BIG BIG LOVE Freeverse Contest by voices.
2200 points, ended May 26, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i see you've chosen not to edit, which is fine... i think it's quite a sweet piece, but it really isn't what we were looking for in this contest
i will say however, many thanks for entering the contest
thank you
G.x
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LOVE this, I HAVE to show this to my friend. Such common feelings expressed here. Like putting the emotions we feel into the perfect words. line number 11 surprises me, didn't know you wanted to bang him. j/k.
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check your heavy use of pronouns.. and some spelling mistakes
you've got plenty of time to edit and sort this lovely little piece out..
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