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Bitter Realities

You look at me and smile with a hyena's laugh.
Your soft words dig into me and make my heart bleed with their blatant lies.
You don't realize yet that I know who you are,
So you keep cutting my soul into millions of pieces.
You keep cutting and cutting and finally decide its time to throw it away.


When you do you show no care.
You toss it away as an old thing you should have thrown away long before.
You used to show such care with your heartbreaks, but you've given up on that.
You let me see you long before it's time.
The fact that you're not who I thought bites me hard and won't let go,
And yet I let you play with me like your playground,
Because at least I'm close to you.


Even if I am a useless toy, even if I'm just your cruel twisted joke,
At least you recognize me. At least you know my name.
So I let you flatter me with your lies,
And I let you shower me with hateful love,
Because even though it is fake, and hateful, it is still love.

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option numbah ten. Age 14.

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  • Vera Rich
    November 23, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my "Celebrating Poetry and Poets" competition. However, you seem to have misunderstood the purpose of it. For your poem makes no mention of either poetry or poets! Maybe the speaker in this poem is intended to represent (or to be addressing) a poet - but this is not stated in the text itself, and it is on the basis of the text itself that a competition judge must decide. Moreover, so gloomy a poem can hardly be considered "celebratory". Sorry - but for this competition your entry has to be considered a "non-starter". But I wish you luck with it elsewhere!


  • crazymomma
    August 10, 2008
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    The metaphores were very nice. It is sad to be so lonely you would rather be used than alone. You conveyed this message well. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • kavi22
    August 2, 2008
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    OMG this is exactly how I feel! I absolutely love it, Thanks for entering!


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    July 20, 2008

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    This is an awesome poem. Man I knew what this felt like even before I broke it off with my ex Greg almost 6 years ago. I can relate! Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • flyingphoenix
    June 1, 2008
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    this was a good read. i loved the title, it fits really well with the poem, or vice versa LOL

    there were some great lines in there, and you have written perfectly a lot of the emotions, without 'whinging'.

    Great write, thanks for entering,

    sunny


  • Angelflower
    May 28, 2008

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    This was really interesting..
    The metaphors that you used
    were all really interesting ..
    You did a really good job
    thank you for sharing this
    best of luck..

    Angel


  • InfiniteCaitlin
    May 18, 2008
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    Mmm. This is really cliche. But you are one of my younger contestants. this was alright. Kind of just rambling. Not very smooth and almost not a poem. Kind of like sentences. I suggest using a thesauraus and tightening up the lines. try other subject matter. Because I am not a fan of tired love poems. But thats just me.

  • crazymomma
    May 16, 2008

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    I have so done this before. I really love the playground and useless toy metaphores used here. Thanks for entering

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