Unraveled already,
she spat upon me
her words hurt more
than any gunshot could
tearing me apart at the seams
while I was already broken down.
Mockery of my grief,
she put me through
she called it amusing
but there are some times
when humor just isn't appropriate.
A long slide downward
was rapidly hastened
and I start tumbling
into the abyss
of anger and sleepless nights.
Critical information withheld
this all could have been avoided,
I silently scream to myself
and watch as the pit of despair
grows ever wider and taller
until I look around myself
and see only lost hope
shattered dreams
and a soul cracked and
splintered in a thousand different ways.
Author notes
My ex broke up with me and then had the good graces to rub salt in my pain by mocking my grief while I was already still hurting substantially from the breakup itself. This aftershock ended up hurting me a lot more than the breakup itself. And in the end, her reason for breaking up with me was something that, had I known it when I started the relationship, I never would have agreed to go into the romantic relationship in the first place. I feel used.
My poem combines love, hate, passion, sadness, and the picture prompt itself. No lies, just love, is what I really wish was the case here, but sadly, such will have to wait until the next time. If there is one.
A contest entry
- No Lies, Just Love... by Fallen Grace.
900 points, ended June 8, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful
Very well done. A great expression for the theme. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thanks for the good luck, but the contest has been over with for a while.
Hmm, I don't seem to be getting the comment rating option any more. That's odd.
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This is a truly beautiful, emotional poem that really moved me. I like your format and how you spaced each line. You did very well on this poem
I'm sorry that you had to feel all that pain, I really hope that you can pull through okay in the end. If you want to talk, you can message me =]
Great job and Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you. I'm currently seeing a therapist since early this semester which helps somewhat, although it's a long slow process, and the therapy will likely end at the end of the semester when I graduate.
I'm hopeful, but this definitely isn't easy, and I appreciate your encouragement. Okay seems a long way away, but I hope it isn't as long away as it seems like it might be.
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