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Abuse

I have a voice but I can not talk
everyone ignores it
because they are all afraid


I am so young and scared

they look and see bruises
everywhere


it's my nightmare
I can't confide in anyone


over there is another girl
so unsure of everything
and she's done nothing wrong


yet the state took her away
from her family


why did they take her
and not even see me


I'm the demon you struggle with
outcast, and rejected


I know I smell
people wrinkle their noses


I can't take a bath
that's when mommy or daddy visits me


I have a voice but I can not talk
they might take everything I know
someone will hunt me down
and kill me


the little girl over there so perfect
and needs to be with her mommy

 

At least I have my mommy
Though I stay hungry
I may cry from being bruised
but daddy and mommy say
I'll be stronger


I have a voice and I am scared to use it
I can't say what I really think or feel
people will laugh
then I won't know anybody


so my voice won't be heard
cause mommy and daddy need me
or she might get hurt

Author notes

This poem I did is about abuse. This is the child talking about abuse, and about how she can't talk to anyone because she's afraid. The system is really messed up in the fact they tend to take the wrong children away from their parents and overlook the ones that really should be gone. The goverment system nowadays really makes me mad at how they handle situations like this.

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  • jogn
    May 26, 2008
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    Well done

    I agree with you a 100%


  • Sweet Sorrow
    May 14, 2008

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    This is a poem that really speaks and captured the international problem in every part of the world, same here where the child abuse in one main problem, a sickening truth which needs attention on how to minimize this sad plight of children. Very well said.


  • hdp411
    May 13, 2008
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    I definitely agree with how the government system is these days. Abuse is wrong! I'm a firm believer...physical/emotional/whatever. All of it needs to go. It sickens me how people are today. You've captured the feelings that needs to be stressed. Definitely a personal experience that I'm sure many can relate to. This is a sad truth! Great write.


  • catz Moderators member
    May 13, 2008

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    Spoken simply, poignantly from the mind of a child, Kari. You wrote this very well from that perspective. No flowery phrases, no fancy images... just the plain childlike, heartfelt pain carried by the child.

    Congratulations on the Gold

    love and
    Granna


  • Tattboyspet
    May 12, 2008

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    I've always had this thing about protecting our future ... WAY too much abuse goes on with them and I would LOVE to get my hands on the creeps that hurt our kids ~frown~
    congrats on the gold Kari

  • Shadow Darkstar
    May 10, 2008

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    Ouch. This one hits a little too close to home for me. Good write though, and you protrayed the message VERY well. I'm proud to call you one of my friends in this poetic world. [♥]


  • JustSimplyLissa gold member
    May 10, 2008

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    Kari darln' this is an amazing write and does deserve to be published. Thank you for giving a voice to so many who cannot use their own.


  • Valley Girl silver member
    May 10, 2008

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    Wow! Such a truthful write sis! You really have blown this one out of the water! Amazing write! Congratulations on the Gold!

  • silverfish
    May 10, 2008

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    congratulations on your fine verse, the theme and structure produce a strong emotional poetic narrative. -silverfish


  • maralisa silver member
    May 10, 2008

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    so my voice won't be heard
    cause mommy and daddy need me
    or she might get hurt
    This poem is great I can relate to alot of your words as I was that person scared to speak for the fears of abuse was once me .congratulations on your shiny .


  • Spiritual Poet gold member
    May 10, 2008

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    awwwwwwwww

    How true and sad this is. I deal with abused kids on here daily and sometimes hear things that are beyond belief. The system, the parents and other adults often fail the most vulnerable ones. This is well done and sad. God bless you, Mark


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    May 10, 2008

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    A really excellent piece. I love the way you wrote this from the child's perspective. This made your piece so much more heartfelt, strong and intense.
    Thanks so much for your entry.
    Gaylene

    • Kari gold member
      May 10, 2008
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      Thank you so much..I feel so very honored for the gold and blown away literally


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 10, 2008

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    So sad!! You have done a brilliant job in giving these children a 'voice' here.. so heartbreaking... and I agree with your authors notes too!


  • When Darkness Falls
    May 9, 2008

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    wow

    this poem is really woundorful
    i think u spell haunt wrong did
    u mean hunt or haunt ahhhhhhhhhhhhh
    oh well its still great

    • Kari gold member
      May 9, 2008
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      I did, and just changed it as u commented lol. Thanks for your comment

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