I think of love, and my heart sinks deeper
into a damp and decaying grave of darkness
Faded visions haunt this wounded mind
tearing at it, plucking piece by piece
until it is left frayed and in tatters
a broken remnant of time past.
My inner being begs for one moments relief
from the constant flashes of memory
that invade its secret, sheltered corners
Rusting that which once, shined with crystal clarity
and shouting curses that echo off walls
that have long since become covered in dust.
Thoughts, lying scattered on the floor,
like dried and withered roses,
become suffocated in a thick blanket
of dense mist that is my despair.
I long to be released from this life
to be set free from this torment
that chains my blackened soul
In a list
A contest entry
- Gold Takes All by Xx.Toxic.xX.
430 points, ended April 6, 35 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A very heartfelt and an emotional piece all around. The imagery was nice. Interesting background as well. Short but deff not lacking in anything. Darkness can so easily consume. Well done and thanks for entering.
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Wow!
This poem was very nice.
I loved the picture it went perfectly with it .
I myself have felt this feelings you have described in this piece.
Very heartfelt and emotional.
Tears me up .
Thanks for entering and good luck.
-Mandi
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it is nice to know there are other souls out there that are wandering in the dark, trying to find their way home too................
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And yet again...you bring emotion into every single one of your writes. It is impossible to get tired of your poetry. The imagery was brilliant, and the way you sound...sad. This is certainly one of my favorites. I simply cannot get enough. Awesome job on this one.
~W.W~
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Very sad touching piece..
I long to be released from this life
to be set free from this torment
that chains my blackened soul
I feel that way sometimes too...wondeful poem my friend
Ruby
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Thoughts, lying scattered on the floor,
like dried and withered roses,
become suffocated in a thick blanket
of dense mist that is my despair.
These lines, to me, made this poem. This is a very emotional and thought provoking write. The words flowed from the screen as I read them and penatrated my heart. Well done. Good luck in the contest
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I really liked this poem. I am haunted by memories from the past so it felt like I was reading about my own life.
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I have slashed at the accursed moon,
for the sadness that it brings you,
for I want your heart strong and free,
to feel the pulse within my breast
that beats so soulfully to you
give rebirth to the withered rose
to become the bud of bloom,
the love that seems so dark,
my eyes will lift its gloom,
if only
you will allow me in... Love, Chez
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This heart has been asleep in the darkness for so long , it will take it some time to reawaken, but with a friend such as thee by my side, I feel that I will be able to trust it again in time, Please bear with me ~Bret~
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Forever has no span,
no bridge for me to cross,
to be in love is to understand
the suffering of your loss
I will wait with thee so quietly,
for as long as there are words
know my heart is beating
and know that you are heard Chez
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This made me tearful
Such sadness in your heart...brillently penned,masterful verse my friend.
So much it brought tears to my eyes, feeling empathy's touch.
My inner being begs for one moments relief
from the constant flashes of memory
that invade its secret, sheltered corners
Rusting that which once, shined with crystal clarity
and shouting curses that echo off walls
that have long since become covered in dust.
Thoughts, lying scattered on the floor,
like dried and withered roses,
hugs
~Lisa~
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Thank you for dropping by and having a look within my soul, your comment is much appreciated ~Bret~
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From the chains that bind your soul to pain and darkness. The echo's of the past still haunting your present. Set me free...from pain and tourment. Very thought provoking poem. Leaves the reader to contimplate more. Niceley done ~Sie
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Thank you much, I am glad that it was to your liking ~Bret~
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Ok this made me cry almost..lol. girly of me I know.. But you wrote this so beautifully! the pain and heartbreak in this was just so heart wrenching! the image that you created just brought tears to the eyes..and the picture just really helps bring home how lonely and sad this write is.. I am a little embarrassed to say this because I'm sure that this can getting tyring to read, but it's like you wrote about me! lol.. strange like I said but very true.. again a great write.. but just thought that I would bring this to your attention.. in the last line you said my two times.. not sure if that is how it's supposed to be but it read a little strange. anyway another heartbreaking write.. well done..
Angel
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Thank you much for bringing that to my attention, when a get to writing, my mind seems to be pouring things out so fast, that I often double words without even realizing that I have done so. I guess that is what comes from not thinking about what I am writing and just going with the downpour of thoughts that flood my mind, Thank you kindly for such wonderful comment ~Bret~
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Your welcome.. I can understand completely..That happens to me as well, and some people can make you feel really bad about not realizing that mistake before you post.. So I thought that I would just give you a heads up..Well I hope that your mind never stops pour forth such beautiful writes! Makes some of us damned souls out here feel like were not all that much alone..Keep writing dearheart! and peace to you..
Angel
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