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The Human Race

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A moment flashes by,

I see before my eyes,

clarity, within me,

within all.

There is no death,

life is indeed eternal.

Superficial solutions,

we cling to life,

our earthly home.

Reflections,

to be desolved in time.

Matter stays,

energy soars...

Words, visions,

they do not exist.

Manmade illusions,

creating burdens,

to blind

humanity.

Slow down

release the burdens,

there is no finish line.

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  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 23, 2008

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    Brilliant!!!

    Thank you for sharing this inspiring and thought-provoking gem with us!! Congratulations on all the shiny cups!! Peace Always, Cyn


  • Keith Drew gold member
    September 11, 2008
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    MMM in a lot of ways its strikes true with my way of thinking.The line we cling to life somehow tells me that you are clinging.
    Inbetween the lines your afraid.
    Don't be hun its all a natural occurance it has been this way for millions of years.
    And if there is just nothing afterwards well we won't know a thing about it.
    Until we are aware again.

    MMM good write inspires me.


  • Meme Wheeler
    September 5, 2008

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    "We cling to life... there is no death!"

    This is powerful. As Christians we truly know that holding on to Him is holding on to life, and surrendering unto Him means to reject Death! Profound write!!!


  • jackysunshine
    September 4, 2008

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    Excellent

    Clarity indeed. Wise words well written
    If only all humanity realised the illusion of life and its infinity.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    humm..I like the depth and the beauty of the subject within your last line that there is no finish line..ah..wonderful infinte feel I love it...


  • jjbreunig3
    August 24, 2008
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    An intriguing piece...

    An intriguing piece; I have to agree with its conclusion, "there is no finish line" - for we are definitely not in competition with each other; hopefully one day, we will learn to not create more "manmade illusions" that lead to additional and unnecessary "human burdens". --Joe


  • Sarah957
    August 23, 2008
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    "Slow down
    release the burdens,
    there is no finish line." - Loved it, very profound.



  • LastWords
    August 18, 2008

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    I think I'll follow your advice, Poet!



    "Slow down
    release the burdens,
    there is no finish line."



    Sincere Sigh Scribe!
    Beautiful...


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    August 14, 2008

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    This is fabulous! Very spiritual, which I like. And it flows so nicely...a pleasure to read! Pam


  • fathom me
    August 11, 2008

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    ..lets not acknowldege the rat race anymore and live without it as a benchmark.. thats the meaning I've taken.. and I simply love it!! Thank you for sharing


  • Shadow Lynx
    August 7, 2008
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    Super write !! Slow down indeed release the burdens , live for the moment, society spends far too much time buried in the past or hunting down the future when the only thing that matters is the moment we are living Then only then will we see there is no finish line.

  • darrylblacksr
    August 6, 2008
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    First let me say congrats to all the trophys you won on this poem. To me this seems very spiritual and the understanding of God's word and his promises of a better eternal life...


  • SageyBaby
    July 31, 2008

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    I really liked this! It was religious but still quite simply poetic. I read you were religious, and you are quite spiritual. I believe in god too, and he has brought miracales for my family. May god bless you, and good luck in the contests because your poem is lovley. I really enjoyed "Slow down

    release the burdens,

    there is no finish line.

    " it's true there is no finish line and the world is developing so fast, and for what?


  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    July 31, 2008
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    Great

    WOW!!!!! this is a heart felt wrenching and very powerful it's goes straight to the heart I like it the soul of it. once again, powerfully done
    Keep writing I like what I see Love the last line.


  • Re-invention silver member
    July 17, 2008
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    true and nicely done love... enjoyed the power and beauty of this write


  • Knight Tigress
    July 13, 2008

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    I liked this very much. It is simple, but beautiful-we as the "human race" do tend to create our own problems, that was good how you addressed that. I wrote a poem last year that is posted on my page called the "White man & The Black Flame," I believe you would find depth and love and even fear in my peice. It is about the death of my mother's fiance' about 6 years ago by cancer and how it effected me, how I saw my mother crumble beneath my feet and what I knew I had to do, just in order to pick up the peices that were left behind like shattered glass shards in the dark.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    I would rate this..

    A ten for it's message, and a ten for it's message! get it? nice piece of writing here, and I agree why is everyone so rushed? living is not a 'race' to the finish line.


  • Maureen silver member
    July 11, 2008
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    Astute observations about life and death! Very nicely done!

    <3 Maureen

  • celadia
    July 10, 2008
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    I'm glad you got a lot of trophies for this piece, it's so zen.


  • who iam
    July 9, 2008

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    Amazing clarity throughout

    Kathy,

    Well thoughtout,and with simplicity in each phrase.
    Gret read,thanks for sharing.

    Who iam


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    July 9, 2008
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    Ahhh, such beauty and truth lies within this marvelous, inspirational write!


  • Denierim
    July 7, 2008

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    For the prompt to be death, you certainly did a marvelous job making it look so peaceful and soft. I love your wording and the soft atmosphere of this poem, not going in too deep and dark like many others. I like this one a lot!


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    July 6, 2008
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    Beautifully done. I love where this took me, the whole feeling is peaceful, but powerful. Bravo!


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    July 6, 2008

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    Great work and congratulations
    to you on all of your trophies for
    this wonderful write! Thanks for
    sharing it here!




    Jeremy0826

  • icebear
    July 4, 2008
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    very quick

    Earth Mother. Our Father. We the errant children.


  • Endeavor gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    Very Good


    Manmade illusions,
    creating burdens,
    to blind
    humanity.

    Slow down
    release the burdens,
    there is no finish line.

    Very well thought out verse
    Congradulations on the Bronz

    Rick

  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    June 22, 2008

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    Wow

    This is great I like the way your words come together and bring about your vision you are a vert talent Poet This is a wonderful poem

  • Bob Fox
    June 21, 2008

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    forever

    mybe forever we shall be. perhaps in the golden age. and as a reader of new age ideas i often wonder...very interesting write there gal.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 20, 2008

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    Such a great write

    Amen to this for we live as though their is no tomorrow we all need to slow down and look about at our young and teach them love and respect


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    June 20, 2008
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    True words, of enlightenment
    Man has buried his spirit, deep in the caves of matter
    Well done

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    June 18, 2008

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    Hello Pisces Rainbow. I saw you in this contest and so thought I would congratulate you on winning the Bronze Trophy. This piece of yours is very different to one's I have checked it, almost reads like you were going free verse on us, shock, horror, hahaha. Interesting thoughts in this poem, and I have to say nothing in it that I do not disagree with. My regards, and once again, congratulations.


  • HellRaiser21
    June 17, 2008

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    Great content, it's good to see poetry with thought. Though syaing that it does not flow very well, it is not the smoothest poem. I put you as a finalist because i was looking for inspiration and not purely a great poem.


  • Pandorea
    June 12, 2008

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    this is really funky. the whole PoV that death isn't real, life is eternal etc. i like it.

    thanks for entering.


  • echo-ink
    June 11, 2008
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    (Great Big Smile)

    for sis, I was about to disagree with on your poem, 'till I saw the Prompt: DEATH, silly me, poem:
    The Human Race. so true.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    June 9, 2008

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    this is such a wonderful take on the prompt and the truth within your words is beautiful and grasping for my mind as it left me thinking and considering over the descriptions that you had penned here. well done


  • KayJay
    June 8, 2008

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    Wonderful take on the prompt... and wonderful truth in you words... There's such depth here... and hope. Well done and well deserving of the recognition...
    Ken


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    June 6, 2008

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    A very well written piece although pretty hard on these old eyes back ground kinda blurry, but still a very good write, Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.


  • Valley Girl silver member
    June 5, 2008

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    Great take on the prompt. A very uplifting take on life. One suggestion, the background is a little hard to read, but other than that this is a nice write. Thank you for sharing, and congrats on the HM.


  • stylization
    June 4, 2008

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    lovely poem. the background's a bit confusing, though, makes it a little hard to read, but its still a beautiful write.


  • AsIThink gold member
    June 4, 2008
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    Whew! I really like this. "Manmade illusions,
    creating burdens,
    to blind
    humanity." Wonderfully thought-provoking to me. You did an excellent job with the background (I thought for sure that I saw this one before? Oh well...). Lots of imagery here (good imagery). Excellent...


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    June 4, 2008
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    Excellent

    Aye, I tend to agree with you. A very fine write indeed. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • swim.x
    June 4, 2008

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    This is a really nice but dark outlook on the world and life. Sometimes I totally agree with you.
    This poem was really thoughtful of you.


  • Susan John Francis
    June 4, 2008

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    Yeah their is no Finish Line!!!!!!!!!!!!1 In deed..........Very thoughtful.....
    congrats on da golden cup.
    Cheers Susan

  • lyrebird gold member
    June 4, 2008

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    A very thought provoking piece, and with such beautiful use of language. I thought that some of the lines seemed a little short, but nevertheless, still a great piece.

    Congrats on the HM.

    - Jojo x sinnocence


  • Rockerstar
    June 4, 2008

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    Mmm....I agree always we are rushing from one moment to the next never taking stock of what is in front of us.


  • PerfectImperfection
    June 3, 2008
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    A very thoughtful piece of penning. Straight forward and to the point. Well penned!


  • jackysunshine
    June 3, 2008
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    Brilliant

    An excellent write. Beautiful true words of wisdom.


  • Captivated Lioness gold member
    May 30, 2008

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    So true

    That that is no finish line; this life is an exercise of experiential value where we solve our own souls and individual needs. May we all release our burdens and soar! Blessings, J.


  • kao3
    May 30, 2008

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    Belief in oneness explained.

    Enjoyable references and soothing meter. Matter of fact disenfranchising of wasteful inquiries. Those who don't agree with time will not waste it!


  • Sara Bellem
    May 29, 2008

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    This is beautiful, its no wonder you won a trophy Thank you so much for the wonderful comment you gave me on my contest poem. You were are quite powerful and undescribly beautiful Sara Dawn

  • darrylblacksr
    May 29, 2008

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    Definitely incredible, This poem shows illusions that
    society made to confine humanity's struggle towards the evolution of reality. Well done my friend and congrats on the trophy... God Bless

  • echo-ink
    May 27, 2008
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    Beautifully written,

    Your words - Manmade illutions, creating burdens, to blind humanity. How very true those words are. It makes me think of certain un-kind doctrines. I won't go into it, but I will say this - I don't believe God's justice = fire. loved the poem, a lot of thought put into it.

  • Keith Drew gold member
    May 25, 2008

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    There is no finish line only the circle of eternity.
    What a wonderful write.
    Well done you, very philosophical and imaginative.
    Takes the reader to a totally different dimension.
    Within a moment.


  • Puppydog gold member
    May 23, 2008

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    SO LOVELY!!!!

    I agree with all of my heart with your beautiful poem! 's Man has lost what he cherishes most, will we ever find it again? I see some have and try to show others but for the most part it does not look promising.


  • Spider Mistress
    May 23, 2008
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    this is a very powerful poem. great job


  • daviscth silver member
    May 19, 2008

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    This is really beautiful and the background makes me feel so good!! Thanks for posting this for me.


  • jackysunshine
    May 19, 2008
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    Wonderful words

    Lovely write.Its a shame everyone can't see the bigger picture

  • Judith Chandler
    May 18, 2008

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    A truly spiritual poem and a good outlook to have. It would help to be able to let go more easily at the inevitable moment.


  • jackreed3 gold member
    May 16, 2008
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    This is a master Peice.. I love it.. Geat Job...
    Your Friend in Poetry... JackReed3


  • tawk gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    Wow this is amazing and so thought provoking! Yes we come into this world with nothing and leave the same way. Niaish for sharing my friend. A winner for sure Theresa


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    May 16, 2008

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    Yep I agree,with the comment below. Words form visions. Visions are dreams that can be made physical. The rest of the piece is very very beautiful. Wondeful work indeed.

    All the best
    Wayne Leon


  • WisdomWarrior
    May 16, 2008
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    I like your form and the flow of the piece is perfect. I have to disagree with the lines:

    "Words, visions,
    they do not exist."

    All things were formed with the mere words of GOD and dreams and visions have been promised by HIM.

    Beautiful background though.

    One Love,

    John


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    Extraordinary!!!!

    The concept of never ending, on and on and on and on---can be intimidating---makes one want to polish up one's halo and eternal resume!!!

    Aesthete

  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    May 10, 2008

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    Outstanding!

    There is so much truth in your writing, that makes me want to keep reading and reading... This is beautiful. You have a very powerful, and wonderful gift.

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