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another day, another door closed.

i can see you now, crawling along the surface and
you're still alive but
it's just like that last time and i know that
you won't hold on much longer
i don't have to worry much longer
every breath i take is like a knife to the chest
i'm gasping and calling out your name but
you don't hear me, you can't hear me
everything's gone away and i can't see and i think
maybe you're to blame and maybe i felt your hand
as you reached down to pull me out
and you looked at me and your face
that look you wear so well
and i know what you were thinking and i could breathe again but then
it all went away
because you weren't even real and
you didn't even mean it
you sent me back to live among the hounds

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  • queen Greeters member
    May 27

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    Welcome To All Poetry

    Hi ali j. fancycancer

    This poem reminds me of a dream, very cool poem

    Please keep writing, reading and commenting

    Barbara
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  • LionessK Greeters member
    May 10
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    This expresses very well what you are thinking and feeling. It does help to write, vent through poetry. I do have a suggestion for one line, I will send it through a message.
    I hope you will continue writing and sharing your thoughts with us all.


    ~Kristy